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The Firelight Honor Open in new Window. (E)
... the crowd murmured as firelight flashed on his knife blade ...
I believe this would be a good essay to share with others on this upcoming Presidents Day
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 Do You Hear Open in new Window. (E)
state department appointee may have a problem = FIRST DRAFT = Please CRITIQUE
In this sentence, should the title or his name appear first, like so = = By 8:20, Jonas Millikin, the newly appointed American Ambassador =
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The sentence is fine, because the "newly appointed" is not part of the formal title, but a descriptor. No issues there!
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state department appointee may have a problem = FIRST DRAFT = Please CRITIQUE
(as the conference room paragraphs seemed stilted and sterile, I added Estonian pastry and coffee to the conference room)
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 Do You Hear Open in new Window. (E)
state department appointee may have a problem = FIRST DRAFT = Please CRITIQUE
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 To Survive Open in new Window. (E)
First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
More paragraphing to make for easier reading
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 To Survive Open in new Window. (E)
First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
now 3595 words

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Enough To Know Open in new Window. (ASR)
Something IS there in the dark, and that's enough to know.
Several had suggested the brothers' names were too similar, thus confusing. So "Luke" is now the name of the older brother.
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 To Survive Open in new Window. (E)
First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
some think the end is too preachy, please review and give your opinion
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 To Survive Open in new Window. (E)
First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
I had to expand the word count for the site I proposed this work for. PLEASE CRITIQUE (see notes at the beginning of the manuscript - thanks)
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 To Survive Open in new Window. (E)
First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
dropped this to under 3k words for a contest. Do you read this as Young Adult fiction?
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I re-worked some of the passages. I needed to show the women as being the force contributing to the advancement of this early society.
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