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 To Survive Open in new Window. (E)
First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
More paragraphing to make for easier reading
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First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
now 3595 words

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Enough To Know Open in new Window. (ASR)
Something IS there in the dark, and that's enough to know.
Several had suggested the brothers' names were too similar, thus confusing. So "Luke" is now the name of the older brother.
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 To Survive Open in new Window. (E)
First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
some think the end is too preachy, please review and give your opinion
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 To Survive Open in new Window. (E)
First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
I had to expand the word count for the site I proposed this work for. PLEASE CRITIQUE (see notes at the beginning of the manuscript - thanks)
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 To Survive Open in new Window. (E)
First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
dropped this to under 3k words for a contest. Do you read this as Young Adult fiction?
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 To Survive Open in new Window. (E)
First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
I re-worked some of the passages. I needed to show the women as being the force contributing to the advancement of this early society.
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 To Survive Open in new Window. (E)
First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
I would like some more critiques and suggestions, thanks.
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 To Survive Open in new Window. (E)
First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
critique requested
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 Alluding to Too Much Open in new Window. (E)
common mistake corrected by a memory trick
mainly to tell you this didn't take too long.
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The Firelight Honor Open in new Window. (E)
... the crowd murmured as firelight flashed on his knife blade ...
by removing the "spoiler" I hadn't realized was in the description
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On The Fast Track - Stalking 'Gators Open in new Window. (E)
Adventures in tracking nature's trail signs.
after a comment that the coffee pot was unnecessary for the story, I changed "necessary pot of coffee" to requisite pot of coffee.
That's m' story and I'm sticking to it!
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The idea of an unnecessary coffee pot is a bit foreign to me. I suppose there are folk who live without one, but if I didn't have a coffee pot, my days wouldn't be stories. They wouldn't even be post-it notes on the menu.
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