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I try to give comprehensive reviews.
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I like reviewing poetry and short stories.
Favorite Item Types
I really love structured poems with good rhythm and rhyme.
Least Favorite Item Types
I don't enjoy reading long stories riddled with grammar or spelling mistakes because these distract me.
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If I don't enjoy reading it on some level, then I won't review it. So if you got a review from me, even one with a low rating, I enjoyed the read.
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Review of Lust  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)


You wrote a free verse poem about wanting a new and deeper relationship with a mentor.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found you asked why the urge, and I can only say it's really common to want the mentor relationship to develop into something more.

Well done writing a good poem that describes the ache of wanting to develop with a mentor.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Creationism 101  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Comments

You wrote a short story about the debate about evolution.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found at the end of the story, when you wrote "and left there statements", you meant their.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes, Muzzy is a funny prof.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

It's okay.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes. Good job having an event happen that few would believe.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)

You wrote a free verse poem about the constructs of modern man.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are mostly well-chosen. But it isn't an essay and it isn't nonsense.

I found you raised some really good points: transcend (or do the opposite?), and live in the confines of the work schedule.

Well done writing a thoughtful poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)

You wrote a poem about God's role in our relationships.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen, except romance.

I found your poem reminded me that a couple who loves God first is helped by that through many difficulties.

Well done writing about the importance of faith.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote a poem about leaves covered with snow in winter.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me, except for the last line where leaves can be read two ways, and one way is a grammar error.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of snow would be great and really suit your writing.

Well done writing a nice poem that captured the sleepy cold and the outdoor fun of winter.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.5)

You wrote a prayer noting harps can be used to worship God.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me. Your capitalization is distracting.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of a harp would be great and really suit your writing.

I found the title in both places probably wants "of" to not be capitalized, to be consistent with your writing.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Jesse  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

You wrote about a lynching.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found the quotes can be removed from a couple of words,
- unable to ‘tell’ their stories - tell is fine.
- witch is fine without quotes, too.

Well done writing a chilling story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Battles Within  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a free verse poem about the importance of companionship.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found it's not clear whether the companion is another person or is God.

Well done writing a poem that shows why it's important we not be alone.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of HASANA  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
General Comments

You wrote a good story about the origins of happiness.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found a couple of mistakes in
- A HUGE STONES FALLING ON HER TRACK, SHE FALL DOWN
- a huge stone... she fell down.
- ON A FEW MOMENTS
- in a few


Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a good story. Remember to punctuate each sentence.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Hyperbole  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

You wrote a fun poem about hyperboles.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I laughed at your couplet
- And though my feet are killing me,
- I won't be a fatality.

Well done writing a fun and educational poem! Thanks for making me laugh today.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a free verse poem describing the bliss and challenges of long-term love.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found your poem reads more as prose.

Well done writing about a difficult topic and capturing it well.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Service Dog  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote an arkquain about a dog in good health.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen, but maybe the genre animal would be good.

I found your poem has a self-referencing bitem. Is this part of the form of the poem?

Well done writing according to this difficult form.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a free verse poem about sharing an experience with the moon.

Grammar and spelling are mostly good and seldom distract me. However, ellipses are like this.... It's 3 in the middle of a sentence and 4 at the end.

Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of the moon would be great and really suit your writing.

I found I liked that the moon cried back and what she said.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of the toe incident  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
General Comments

You wrote a horror story about a possessed watermelon.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me. You need some paragraph breaks though.
Genres are not well-chosen. This isn't comedy.

I found in " i felt a presence in the back of my mind it was saying "you"
- capital I,
- delete it was, add a comma after saying,
- capitalize You.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

No, it moves too fast to suspend disbelief.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes, but it needs proper punctuation (see examples in published fiction).

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

I guess it's in the kitchen but it should be out in the yard. No, I don't know where it is.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a free verse poem about a tragedy.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

Your poem tells a story -
Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a poignant insight into an important part of life.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of This Tainted Love  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)

You wrote a free verse poem about tainted love.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me, but maybe you want to capitalize perfect at the start of line 5.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found many of the short phrases ending with periods aren't sentences.

Well done writing a poem that expresses hurt and frustration.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Her First Time  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
General Comments

You wrote a preamble that could have been horror or erotica, but it turned out to be something simple.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres aren't well-chosen. I don't think it's comedy. Maybe drama.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

No, because we don't know what it is.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

No, because "it" is hidden for too long, and it doesn't sound natural.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

N/A.

Well done writing a short story that keeps the reader guessing.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Election Day 2016  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)

You wrote a poem about the election in 2016.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found wind’ll blows isn't grammatically correct. I would drop the 'll, or replace it with it.

Well done writing a good poem expressing election hype.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote a poem asking what the meaning of life is, and finding an answer.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found your poem is free verse with a rhyme scheme you kept to sometimes. Anti-corruption is a big wish. It's interesting that your answer is to spread equality.

Well done writing a poem on a big topic.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.0)

You wrote a free verse and very abstract poem about a mountain seeing Earth and listening to space.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of a mountain would be great and really suit your writing.

I found aplazcement maybe was meant to be aplacement, and silenting was perhaps meant to be silencing.

It is too abstract for me.

Well done writing a poem expressing an unusual perspective.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Memories  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a very long prompt in front of a poem. Your poem matches the prompt given.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found the prompt quite long to read. The poem doesn't say whether the son died or grew up and left home.

Well done writing a good description of old age's awareness of the precious memories of youth.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote a fun free verse poem about how to make a sheppard's pie.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of a sheppard's pie would be great and really suit your writing.

I found repetition of 'of course' in one line doesn't work. I wonder how the pancake mix on the bottom turned out.

Well done writing a free verse poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Comments

You wrote a fable in a poem. Nicely done!

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found the description could have a space replace / in mouse/who .
Prevention as the moral of the story makes a lot of sense. But else boom then bust doesn't make sense in the story about a mouse seeking food.

Well done writing a great poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (1.5)

You wrote an essay on Thanksgiving.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
You could include a cover image that is great and really suits your writing.

I found a few distracting details,
- whats - what's
- Thanksgiving should have a colon in the first and last lines.
- The thankful phrases aren't sentences.
- thankfully, thankful is over the top.

Well done writing your feelings about an important day.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Comments

You wrote a story about cacti.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found one distraction,
- were on cactus that had never - cacti


Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes. Extinction is enough.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes, it's beautiful.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes, and the names are good, too.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a short story that I found a little too short. It would have been nice to see it developed more.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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