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Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSONS: What an impressive piece. Sharp-witted and brilliant. It becomes a station in life for some and others a warning. I am warned of just such a bird in the cage. Your pursuit of an answer, your pain that comes from where you are at, and your usage of the bird as a symbol gives rise to comment. I liked the line: Surely a song remains in the heart until the soul dies. This piece is indeed a lesson.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I applaud this piece because I identified with it.

SUGGESTIONS: Write on! There is a whole world of discovery on your website. I just touched the surface with this fine piece.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS*Star*: A Simply Positve Forum feature that I liked. Candid. Well-written with its funny and yet embarassing details.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE*Star*: I like a "Reader's Digest" kind of moment like this. I applaud your honest style with giving me a story about yourself.

SUGGESTIONS*Star*: Write on! A fully competent writer's piece.

Feather Duster

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Review of The Color of Time  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: You appear to be such a wonderful wonderful person. So honest. So free of bad thoughts. So bathed in light. I browsed your portfolio and read two ribboned pieces. This was one of them. Both showed such beauty and divinity. I can say for myself I have had to been strong in tough situations. I thought I HAD EVERYTHING GIVEN TO ME, but I realized it was the opposite. I had to work to earn what I have and cherish. Your beautiful poem here designs our earth as such precious soil. It is a good earth if we want to save it and then keep it that way. I agree.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I noted how hard you work on this site as a WDC member. I commend you. You are keeping reviews important for us all. Love your graphics.

SUGGESTIONS: Keep writing! Keep reviewing! Keep working through us to make us work together!


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Rated: E | (4.5)


FIRST IMPRES*Star**Star**Star*SIONS: At first I was leery of the first line. But as the poem went along, I noted the "Sounds Of Silence" in it. It became for me a times piece and I liked it immensely. I like the activity going on: "humming and buzzing" and "gas-guzzling" and then your wish for silence. A good strong last stanza to get across!

SUGGE*Star*STIONS: Write on, as a newbie you show real talent. I liked seeing on the Newbie Page. It caught my eye immediately. Glad I visited your port.

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Review of Her Lament  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS*Star*: So many writers have taken up this subject: a forlorn heart that cannot mend. Your subject is admirable. It can be very complicated to deal with this subject. Your lines come up with a real drive to show us the sadness and unfortunate consequences of this young woman. I feel you did very well. Your words seek that woman. As if you do not know her, really. "From far away?" Perhaps, you are affected by just this kind of woman in your dreams of her as you write the poem. You praying for her and your advice to her. Applied well, this can be a very good kind of poem. One line has me only slightly confused: The prior beauty must surely delight. This line stands away from the other lines in the stanzas. Delight about what? Then the line: The final moment of agony. This is very consequential. Words such as this imply a deliverance such a death or something sad. If the line were replaced with an optimistic line the stanza would run better. Now the last line has very good capabilities. Its premise is very admirable. However the word "self-hindering" implies what you mean but more than that a word that is more poetic might work.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: This poem took many directions as the lines played out. It became interesting to find the meaning and although it might have been a little forced by the end of the poem it was well-done and equally complicated.

SUGGESTONS: Work with meaning. Find more exactness in your poetry so that you know where your stanzas are going and just what your words mean. WRITE ON!


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Review of Angels Listened  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS: Such a heavenly poem! It speaks with irony and glistens with good cheer and comfort and joy. I liked the earthiness of the stanzas as they examined Christ's death and then jumped back to Mary and Her Son at birth. Nice theme with repitition. Very thorough poem.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No mistakes appeared to me. Nice formulaic rhyme used.

SUGGESTIONS: Write on! Divine poems are itemized in this folder. Great reading.

Feather Duster


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Review of Dare  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS*Star**Star*: Such a natural and fearless poem! I like the description of what you were talking about included so we might really understand it. Your words are quite beautiful and romantical.

SUGGESTIONS*Star**Star*: Write on! I like your style. It has very good magic to it and does not fade even at the last line. Was the horse named "Dusty"?

Saw this in the Noticing Newbies Newsletter. Good show!


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Review of Our Sharing  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)



IMPRESSIONS*Star*: Good lines, succinct and natural, and artistic. I like your philosophy in it. It is a kind of spiritual thing. I like your calling to another, an artist. You have a pen as a shield, a tapestry of words that can colour the world.

PRAISE AND APP*Star**Star*LAUSE: Good sensibility. I like a poem that explains itself. It does not get obscure. Excellent advice in certain lines. I'd love to say it is a "green" poem but I cannot be the one to say.

SUGGESTION*Star*S: The first line seemed a bit too long. Ortherwise, all lines in a free verse form, were very viable.

SPELLNG/*Star*GRAMMAR: No mistakes.

WRITE ON!

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Rated: E | (4.5)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS: I liked your awarded poem. You have a consequence that lives up to a good morning. It may even be an emotional poem if you think about it: filled with freedoms.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Good theme to it. Nicely imaged on a "porch". Good finality to the lines which give us that consequence of grace and hope at the end for answers to our problems.

SUGGESTIONS: Write on! You have a very satisifying poem here.

Feather Duster
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Review of A few  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: I am very impressed with your stuff, Edgework. I had asked to see "NEW YORK POEMS", I read them all and gathered a great deal from just noting what a good "voice" you have. Somehow, "GETTING INTO BROOKLYN" is my favorite. And the others that are shorter. Yet the long match-play poems explain themselves and our outstanding even though not as formative. I also love what you did for Haiku in a viable way. I think you know the end of the kite string pretty well and reel it in without too much effort.

CRITICAL: Saw no spelling mistakes. I just wouldn't want to edit these poems. They are simply artistic and very good. No problem.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Your cartoon-magic I guess, I must praise you with. Have you read the comic "Nancy"? It is very famous. Bring it up in NEW YORK and it is affluently an original take on life. Landscapes are great with you.

SUGGESTIONS: Keep writing! I like your style and determination to give us some better place to take us to. Your hunger for the deli man is always advice.

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Review of Ariadne  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)



First Impressions*Star*: When a voyage comes along and we take it, we want to be delivered from our uncertainies, our anxieties. With a good line like "vast ocean of love", the expanse of the poem comes across and I find really involved with the poem even though it is short. I think that Danielle Steel's "Safe Harbour" was a good novel and I read, and offers comfort as in poems like these on WDC. I like the innuencdos of a quite a few poems in WDC. Yours is well-placed and marks time. A good poem to have gathered from '05.

CRITICA*Star*L: I can't catch the form but the three stanzas with a last rhyming line are formattically interesting for verse I did not feel you forced lines and they were good sensation words. No spelling, no grammar that was wrong.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE*Star*: I feel you have a golden moment poem here. It is intriquing and finds an interesting finale with a provoking two last lines.

SUGGESTIONS*Star*: None. This poem I may indeed remember.




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Review of Unexpected Gift  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: I know that prompts can sometimes be harder to use than easy to and I myself go both way with prompts. I like what you did with this 60's moment of an older woman who had the VietNam vet in mind. The Coke can was carefully placed on the night they shared on the dock. Quite nice as a 60's inuendo Your best prompt was the tabby cat I think. Your usage of her movements and sense of loving her alone as the two men were talked about made the woman curiously distant from goings-on and genuinely mysterious. Despairing, she finds that box an ultimate treasure!

CRITICAL: No spelling mistakes appeared. No grammar that appeared to me as wrong.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I liked the mysteriousness of this piece. I liked its interesting letter-box formula. I liked the use of a letter in it, as I usually do with letters in pieces, and I liked interestingly, Elizabeth as a smaller character, her being brought up as perhaps someone close to Miriam, a young girl who she met at their place of residence and whom she perhaps finds a bother because she is so much younger.

SUGGESTIONS: You could have enlarged on it. But not everything here at WDC is done that way. I'm satisfied. Good job!


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Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: What a grand story! And none to sympathetic to a good cause. Love of my family has always been what I have always wanted the crux of my writing to be about. Somehow I have a ways to go.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I applaude the sad case of Bill. Your natural words speak destiny and positivity. I liked the good side of BIll. I know the depth his mighty soul might well take, I think. In general, a good public poem. Good, good stanza:

God made men and men make war, and the graves are filled with tears;
and the weeping voices of the slain, have cried throughout the years

But the end? Even better.

CRITICAL: Nothing spelling wrong. No grammar bloops.

Feather Duster
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Review of SAVE A PLATE  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS: I can't help but tell you how particularly honest you sound with this piece. Being a vet is as our countrymen and women must well know is no easy task. I remember telling you that I admire you and the military. This piece about your grandmother is somehow quaintly nostalgic and gives us first hand impressions of your family. Knowing that your ancestory came from the Civil War is really interesting.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: The way the story was handled deserves praise. I liked the examination you want your readers to think on: what about your social conscience? Is the military getting support? I appreciate your thoughts and it gives me something to lend to my own societal positivity.

CRITICAL: Nothing wrong. Your spelling and grammar was excellent. Good waltzing style of writing that was detailed.


Thanks for visiting my portfolio. I was glad to visit yours.

Feather Duster
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Rated: E | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS*Star*: Good little poem concerning the '50's and the beatnik. Very descriptive and suscinct. I think it was good as a tell-it poem, instead of a metaphor poem. Something like a statement. Those who don't know about '50's beatniks would be informed by this piece.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I liked your knowledge of things here. "bagel shops", hmmm, interesting. I'm going to browse the three eras you have to see how this stands up to the others. Excellent jaunt through the times.

SPELLING AND GRAMMAR: In the 10th line, make "definately", "definitely". Other words were spelled correctly.

I am from First Peoples. Glad to read some of your portfolio.


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Review of Love, Mom  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Unratable.)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS: The thought that I kept in my mind when I read this piece was concentrate on "typos". Where I found one was the last line. where I found a missing word. The piece was done well enough with the last remains of Laura being taken care of. As a writer's cramp, the piece stands with good possibilities for a good story. Cryptically does it stand up? I'd have to think about it. Where does one deliniate what you can get out of a piece and what is supposed to be kept a secret for the author's pleasure?

CRITICAL: A descriptive journey from a cemetary to a will reading is a fast jump. Should it have been? I'm just staying with the thought of a more complete story if it were not a Writer's Cramp. Jake as a symbol? Perhaps?

SPELING AND GRAMMAR: It didn't appear to make mistakes.


I enjoyed criticiquing with A.C.E. in mind.

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Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS*Star*: What a sweet, comic poem! Your graphics are alive! I like the circus. And when I go, I want to see an elephant!


PRAISE AND APPLAUSE*Star*: Well-placed colorful lines. I felt that this kind of poem needed to rhyme to be successful and it did. Perhaps, a youngster looking up at the elephant? And then the suspension of disbelief at the end. Cryptic, really. Funny.

SPELLING AND GRAMMAR*Star*: Saw no mistakes.

Enjoyed this feature in the newest Poetry Newsletter.


Feather Duster
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS: Wonderful Part2 Short Story. You have God-given talent and it shows in your true inspiration and the way your stories unfold. I just love your stories. Enchanting, easy to read, well-informing, fairy tales of the heart. I think you have love on your lips. And it is captivating.


CRITICAL: No mistakes. Good.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Keep writing more, they are a real find for WDC members! You have a knack for relaying royalty well. And your details about them are almost flawless.


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Review of Tanya  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: An absolutely viable piece. Such marvelous description! Well-formed stability in the measure of words. Being that you chose a complete description,and that was your preference, I feel that you deserve a high mark.

CRITICAL: You may want to begin a vampire story with more gore. But this was not as such. Vampire stories are not my forte, but I recently wrote one and still did not get blood-and-gore into it enough. I attempted a different take on one too. I liked your surreal message of love between the two however it may be that the word is" vampire" and it has to be viable.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I really think you know what you are doing. You begin and end with finesse. And the romantic element of pieces is always a good quest and very praiseworthy.

Enjoyed this. Easy to read.

Feather Duster
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)


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Op-ed on healthcare debate, published 10/8/09 in regional newspaper. All views welcome!
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IMPRESSIONS: Excellently vibrant as different points were proposed in this. Very on-target. Back-on-track statements. A very candid last paragraph that is something I too believe in. You did not smear a political attitude on us, you were down-to-earth and methodical and it came across as a piece of good quality writing.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I liked your mentioning the current President Obama in it. The venture into healthcare was well-taken as your debating point. More to this than meets the eye. Informational. Detailed.

This point: Brilliant sixth paragraph.

SPELLING AND GRAMMAR: No mistakes I could see. Good quality in your style. It hums along with effort. I realy liked your piece.

THANKS FOR PLUGGING IT>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>


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Review of It Lies Within  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)



IMPRESSIONS*Star**Leaf1*: At first glance there is more description than dialogue, and then half-way down the page it swtiches and the description is replaced by main-line dialogue. So there must have been a reason. No matter. What ever the anesthetic was behind the words, it was collectively a heavenly cloud that hovered above Mort and Sarah. I was very impressed with the detailed knowledge of the author, nothing easy about this piece other than it speaks well and flows well and has understandable dialogue. It placed wisdom at places, I liked that.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE*Star**Leaf2*: I felt an excellent mentalist attitude this piece. Things out of the ordinary and hard-to-explain. All in all, with the innuendos considered in the piece, I liked mostly the thought of a a near-death statement seconded by what it was was a death or afterlife experience that was trying to surface? Things surfaced in a subconscious way after I thought about it. I even acknowledged the terms without feeling offended, when it was stronger and might be complaining it was all the more brilliant in its meaning. To make a long story short, it has many directions. Again I must rely on part-intuition that isn't discussed with the author {/i}and{/i reader.

SPELLING AND GRAMMAR*Star**star3*: You used a free grammar form with this piece when you use a line like:

BUT MORT AND SARAH [/i}KNEW.{/i}

This is very acceptable in fact I have read the better hip books with a contemp style that do this.

No spelling mistakes.


Thanks for giving me the chance to review you.


Feather Duster
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Review of Lost Opportunity  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS: Good managed poem for a spiritual one. Good young lines that find a solution by the end of the poem. It starts as mysterious with the line "before my birth" which makes you read into the poem and its meaning. Good as a field of morality that is questioned perhaps with words of family unity and decisions under God. A daily-like prayer poem, it values life I think.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: A "knowing" poem, it is intelligent, spiritually careful with its lines, valuable with its lines. It sounded like time was spent on it. It was crisp when thought about it in the aloud sense and as a utopian type position, gives a solution that the last stanza asks for. What kind of spiritual being returns and finds this family? I think I understand it. It has a surreal cloud above this poem. Much is said without saying. Something is hiding behind the words.

I thought the crux of a theme pointed to the lines:



But it wasn't long before 'twas clear
We were not struggling year by year.

and then:



"Do not waste your family years.
Struggle with each other every day!
Help each other find your way!"

Great lines.


SPELLING AND GRAMMAR: Mistake as a typo only. lwe'd to we'd in 8th stanza, 3rd line.


A very positive experience.

Feather Duster
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Review of Do You Still ?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Unratable.)


IMPRESSIONS: Candid and beautiful, I liked the theme here. Almost like a song, is the way this poem read. I liked your questions and the turn of phrase at the end that "you" were the one that was going to light a candle, doing something about the situation, A kind of moral poem it fits well as a feature in the last Spiritual Newsletter.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Knowing that you shared "good times" with the person in question in the poem, it is a love poem that extends itself to the spirit and that is always the most admirable. Spiritual poems without question can last an eternity as an eternal question. I like those poems that address the eternal question of being one with perhaps a lonely spirit without one's partner are the best, but that is just my opinion. And finally, each line was a flow into the next, more questions, at the end an answer. When a witness talks about love in a poem, the progress of the poem goes well which it really did in the poem.

SPELLING AND GRAMMAR: Nice jargonized placement of simple words turning into a good picture of a spiritual witness. No mistakes in spelling or grammar that I can see. Correct in its form, it sounds like a song.

Feather Duster
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Review of Home  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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IMPRESSIONS*Star**Leaf3**Leaf5*: My first impressions of your writing is that you are very excellent. I just love your description, it is vivid, quick, fascinating,scintilating, and active. Using that active voice is such a better thing than being passive. Something I myself must dearly work on. I find this a bit of magic, with the mug of chocolate in a wintry setting. The value I get from it is it is a definitive profile from a WDC member. I luckily have some thoughts of this yet your speed and rapidity of being verbal is a grand slam here. Very nice, summer.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE*Star**Leaf3**Leaf5*:I'm no coach but I think you have a world of talent as I said before. You can utilize this with great strides with more pieces on WDC.

SPELLING AND GRAMMAR*Star**Leaf3**Leaf5*: No mistakes, dear. Just maybe indent your paragraphs. A fun item to contemplate.



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Review of A Miracle  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)


IMPRESSIONS: This must be a city-poem. I realized this after reading it and then reading it for the second time carefully as I noted the next to the last stanza. It might have even been the gold nugget in the poem. To have looked at it this way, while I lived in a city, I find it an amazing poem. Ironic, candid, full of detail.

PRAiSE AND APPLAUSE: Whatever kind of poem you wanted it to be, it was just fine. I liked the last line as well. It speaks for itself.

GRAMMAR, SPELLING: No mistakes.

Feather Duster
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