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I will give you an honest review, straight forward. I believe that we improve when we know what and when to better something or ourselves. I am also learning but through this interaction of giving and taking we will both become knowledgeable. I try and always look at a piece from an artistic point of view and then from a grammatical point of view.
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I like to read poetry, fiction, comedy, educational articles. I also like to read scripts, I also write screenplays and know what the criteria is.
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Fiction/nonfiction sci-fiction Poetry Comedy Crime Thriller
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Erotica Gore (vampires, trolls)
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Short stories Poetry
Least Favorite Item Types
Erotic poetry Anything to do with sacrifices,hell,devil
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Keaton Foster,

I'm back again to admire another wonderful and breathtaking poem. A strong poem. You chose a topic which is contemporary and many of your readers will be able to understand. The tone is extremely well set, once you start you need to continue to read to follow all the emotion displayed. I read it with a little girl's curiosity when dominos are hit you want to follow to the end and your poem is similar to that feeling.

Your dictation is superb!

To sum up how I feel about this piece in one word could only be: BRAVISSIMO!!!

I am going to return to your folders to try and discover more of your treasures.

Thank you for such an amazing talent.


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Review of Vanishing Love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sum1,

I love free flowing poems, I try also do make mine in this manner. Your poem even though being writen in free flowing format, has a natural flow to it. The tone varies in emotion from admiration,fear to acceptance and gratitude.

Your dictation is beautiful, you didn't flood this idea with too many adjectives but just enough to give the reader the idea and allow them to follow the emotions.

Part I enjoyed the most: the title, its beyond profund.

This was a pleasure to read, please continue to marvel us with more free flowing poetry.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Sean M. Howland,

This is a very emotional poem. A very strong sentiment is conveyed here, one of bliss at the arrival of a muse, and yet the last two stanzas are very serious and dark.

TONE/DICTATION

The tone is initially of passion but the last two stanzas I felt sadness, sorrowful. The dictation is strong in bringing this to the reader's attention.

IMAGERY/SOUND
All the imagery you use is very vivid and the reader has no problem in identifying where you are trying to go with your poem.

FLOW/RHYME
I enjoy this flow, I think this a perfect flow of the message you are trying to relay to your readers. It starts slow, then builds up, then slowly slows down.

FAVORITE
"Beauty appears, invades my space, tempts my sight.
Her presence enticeing my heart to reach new heights."


REPETITION
There is no repetition that I could see and your line breaks are perfect, in my opinion.

SUGGESTIONS
I love your build up and the wording is sublime, only for me the second half of the third stanza and the last stanza they break the poem up, in the sense of emotion. You have this amazing passion going as you observe this person and then it goes dark, not in a gradual way. If that could have been a little more gradual I personally would have loved this poem on a level 8! I LOVE IT!


Keep writing!

All the best
Natechia dos Reis


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Review of Tranformation  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Dear phoenixalex,

It is a very interesting piece. I can see where you are trying to go with your words. You did say it is a start and I think it is a powerful one. Refine it a little, add some more verses and I'm sure you can have a positive piece here.

Well done, keep writing and don't forget maths, we still need it.


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All the best,
Natechia dos Reis


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Review of white light  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Dear Sara,

The poem was very strong in dictation and the tone was serious. There was flow but not consistent,which I enjoy. Your imagery and sound was present through out the piece. There are a few words I would change but that's my style and every writer has their own style.

I love that you ended the poem with the title rounding it off completely.

Keep writing.

All the best,
Natechia dos reis


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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Dear Keaton Foster,

I enjoyed this biographical piece. It really shows us inside the depths of a writer and what one can accomplish as a writer. I have written so many things and yet I never thought anything of it until I joined writing.com and met people who were willing to give me straight up answers to my one question:" Am I writer?" I think this piece shows a part of what this author accomplished and hopes to accomplish in the future, and that is inspirational to those just taking their first steps.

Thank you for the piece.

All the best,
Natechia dos Reis


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Dear writerchuck,

For me you have hit the nail on the head. Art is different and can be interpreted in many ways. Sure we need to accept criticism so we know what to better and what to aim for but we should never stop expressing ourselves or challenging ourselves, to do so is to die a slow death. We can do so much with what we write,paint and sculpt that moves others in their existence.

I loved the item in every sense! Great job!

Canty wait to read more of your work.

All the best,
Natechia dos Reis


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Review of Wedding Day  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear RT,

I love th writing. You say everything that needs to be said. The wording and emtion was in a perfect tone. You felt the respect and love you had for your partner. The dictation as far as I could see was good. The flow and ryhme were there and made at least to me feel the words said. My favorite line was" we walk throughj the valley of time"

All the best with your writing and keep writing.

Natechia dos Reis


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Review of Ritual  Open in new Window.
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Dear Kiss SoCalScribe,

Very gripping story. It was well written and really kept me interested even though at first I thought it was taking me one way it actually went a completely different way. The imagery was excellent I mean I WAS almost falling off my chair as I read it. I enjoyed how you changed the characters tones throughout especially "Josh". I enjoyed it, even though it is not my type of genre the writing kept me entertained and wanting to read more.

Well done,

Keep writing!
Natechia dos Reis


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Review of Oblivious  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (3.5)
Dear Kiss SoCal Scibe,

This is a story many can relate to. Why do, friends do this to us? Anyway, I have learned also by personal experience that when you are in a way forced to meet someone you don't tend to like them at first, or it's usually that person who irritates you the most at first, that you will land up with. I'm happy it turned out. In your story I enjoyed the structure build up of the story and the grammar use was perfect.

Hope to read more of your work.

All the best,
Natechia dos Reis


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Review of Break  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Dear Silver is Married,

The script is written to scrip standards.

The storyline is interesting.

The characters are interesting and believable.

I like the concept of the storyline, missing knowledge and time.

I think though the dialogues are long in some cases and you only have a few line breaks in between to give the dialogue a breather. Maybe extend one or two of the breaks and this should be an interesting piece.

All the best,
Natechia dos Reis


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Rated: E | (3.0)
Dear Harry,

It's an interesting poem.

I live in South Africa and so seeing snakes, wildlife is a natural occurrence for me. (HAHA)

I'm not particularly a fan of this type of way of writing but I found the imagery interesting. There was some flow and the reader can get the sense of the story. I found it hard to fell rhythm, yet like I say this is a different type of writing for me. If it were possible I would try and Declutter the poem a little.

Great writing and hope to be able to read another one of your works.

All the best,
Natechia dos Reis


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Review of someone is here  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Dear Sara,

To say I like your poem is a lie, I LOVE YOUR POEM! Your dictation is superb, the tone is for me encouragement. The imagery and sound is all there. I like this type of poems and it has flow to it and consistency when you start with the drums and then find the strength within yourself it just brings it to a complete circle for me. A lot of meaning in the words. My favorite expression:"find that sanctuary hidden deep within"

I also enjoy how you leave it to the last phrase to tie up with your title.

I truly enjoyed!

All the best,
Natechia dos Reis


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Rated: E | (3.5)
Dear ncisagentandre (love the name)

I have never revised a Haiku poem but I will give it my best. Here are my thoughts:

DICTION, TONE, VOICE:

The voice is first person, and the tone is cold. The diction is superb.

SOUND PATTERNS:

I found an echo with "falls" and "snow" in the first and second line. I would like to see another verse to see more sound I know that haiku poems are a set standard although I think you have a great idea here maybe change from haiku to more verses, although I love having so much to see and hear in only three lines.

IMAGERY:

Blood falls,cold pure snow,tip tap. Wow.

LINE STRUCTURE: LINE BREAKS, METER, REPETITION:

The line breaks were solid and neat as each line was a complete thought. Punctuation was used well and it was a wise choice. The meter flowed smoothly. There was repetition of "tip tap".

ERRORS:

Not that I can see.

SUGGESTIONS:

Do you really need to say" winter snow" we only get snow if its very cold so thus the winter. Try reading your poem aloud with winter and without or try changing "winter".

FAVORITE LINES:

"Red everywhere beware"

OVERALL IMPRESSION:

This was a most profound piece blood pouring onto snow. Whether it's a physical pain or an emotional/mental pain was unclear, but I liked the fact that it was left to the interpretation of the reader. Each line was a deeply formulated thought filled with intense feeling, and I surely felt it jumping off my screen This was excellent writing. And once again, welcome to Writing.com!

Thanks for sharing your talent with us, and keep writing!

All the best,
Natechia dos Reis


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Review of two tone  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Sara,

I really enjoyed your poem. The imagery you use is very powerful and so is the emotion you can really feel it. I think the beginning completes with end where you mention what would happen to your faith so it gives it a sense of flow. I like that you are not trying to rhyme yet you can still feel the flow.

I enjoyed it can't wait for more of your work.

All the best,
Natechia dos Reis


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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Dear Aeronis,

I enjoyed your poem. I have been a foreigner since 11 months old and the want and need to belong is very strong. I think your first verse points out that need, your second verse I'm having trouble with, I would like to know what are you trying to say exactly?

Your third verse is a perfect ending. I would just try and work on that second verse, I know you can make it more powerful, or if you can just convey to me what you are trying to mean then maybe I can understand it better.

All in all I LOVE it and this especially from someone who has called her home many different places.

I hope this helps,

All the best
Natechia dos Reis
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear writeaway,

I can truly see the abundance of conviction you have portrayed in your words. You use a more common way of making the verses, a way I have always seen but you make it work. I would love to see you make verses that aren't conformed to the 'norm' we have always seen, I truly think you would make a wonderful impact on others and you would also grow as a writer.

In essence a truly magnificient piece that undoubtebly magnifies the One it potrays.

Well done and can't wait for more.

All the best,
Natechia dos Reis
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Review of Klaus  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Carlos Camacho,

All I can really say is BRAVO,BRAVO,BRAVO! Your story about your grandfather was very well written and filled with depth and you can really feel the loss you felt. I was a nurse for 6 years in the Netherlands taking care of the elderly and watching how the pain desolated the families and all we could do was put an arm around them and try and think of the right thing to say it was always difficult, but how you describe the way a young boy goes through that moment is not only heartwarming but reflective for me.

I truly enjoyed this piece!
I am truly sorry for the loss of your grandfather but how you describe him I believe he would be absolutely proud to know his grandson is such a gifted writer.

All the best,
Natechia dos Reis
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Review of The Journey  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Evil Dawg,

I must say your story is very well written full of amazing imagery and feeling.I am really enjoying this entire concept and would love to continue to read more see what else they encountered a new world , a new dimension of time (string theory) your writting method is captivating and leaves the reader thirsty for more.

I hope you will continue this work for I am truly curious to see the next adventure this particular group of individuals encounter.

All the best,
Natechia dos Reis
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi Love_You_22,

I really enjoy the fact that you are trying to merge a typical princess story and giving it a modern twist. You definantly have a story that many can relate to. I just think you need to edit your text try and make 'she' not appear so many times it makes your reading drag a little, believe me I know how hard it is but the more different words you can place in your text and not have so many reoccurences helps the reader enjoy your work alot more.

Also take some time away from your work and go back, rewrite this scene it feels like you are trying to place to much emotion all at once, ease the reader into your story. I defianantly want to see more of your work. Hope I have been helpful and keep on writing.

All the best,
Natechia dos Reis
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Review of The Word  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi Johhny,

Your story is enticing and your build up of the story is definantly captivating. The idea is realistic, everyone has had a word show up in their day more than once. I only have one question when you are talking about being in your cell in your bunk how do you go from reading the word there to the phone company guy?

If you are in jail how can you be speaking to the phone company, I'm not getting that link. I have that also it sounds great but sometimes linking events to one another to make them flow is sometimes difficult. I am really anxious to see more of your work. Keep it coming. Hope to speak to you soon or reading some more chapters.

All the best,
Natechia dos Reis
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