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Rated: GC · Short Story · Adult · #1969642
A man trying to gain a woman's trust and loosen her up in a creative and fun way.
*****AUTHORS NOTE*****

This story is sexual, erotic and elaborate. The reason I decided to post this to WDC is for readers to critique my writing style, as well as my grammar and punctuation mistakes. If a reader wishes to critique the content, they are welcome to do so.
I am a very inexperienced writer. When it comes to a dialogue in a story I am unsure how to punctuate. Also, in pieces I write of this type, I have difficulty writing in just one tense of writing. Throughout this piece I write in past, present, and future tenses.
If any reader has any advice or tips on how to fix either of those issues please feel free to email me and review my piece.
All comments, critiques and reviews are welcome.
Thank you so much,

Deepnthought

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“Let’s play a version of 20 questions.”
“Okay, how do you play?”
“I ask you 20 yes or no questions, one question at a time. Your goal is to reach all twenty questions before you cum. All questions must be answered as honestly and accurately as possible.”
“And the reward for reaching all 20?”
“I’ll do whatever you wish and allow your release.”
“And the punishment for wimping out?”
“That’s for me to know and for you to find out.” We both laughed.
“Okay. So how do we start?” You got on all fours on top of me, looking into my eyes.
“Like this…Question 1 – May I touch you?”
“Yes.” You ran your finger across my cheek and down my face. Down my neck and gently over my breasts. I smiled and you saw my reaction.
“May I take off your clothes?”
“Yes.” You ran your hand down the rest of my body to the bottom of my dress. You proceeded to carefully pull it off. You fingers grazing both of my sides, and I giggle. Noticing my laps of control you asked the third question as the rest of my dress came off.
“Are you ticklish?” I was silent as he slowly removed my bra.
“I’ll ask again, are you ticklish?”
“Maybe.” I finally responded. You dug your fingers into my sides.
“These are yes or no questions.” You said over my laughter.
“Yes, yes. I am ticklish.” I said through giggles. You stopped tickling me.
“At least I know how to get a straight answer from you.”
“Another question please.” You come back up on your hands and knees hovering over me. You lean in; your lips close to mine. Then you lean over toward my ear and whisper to me.
“May I kiss you?”
“Yes” I sighed. You kissed my neck underneath my ear and I moaned. You chuckled a little, and then you kept kissing down my neck. Down my chest and around each of my breasts. I started breathing a little heavier. Then you kissed each of my nipples, gently sucking them as your lips left them standing hard.
“Are you turned on by what I am doing to you?” you asked staring at my face waiting for a response.
“Yes I am.” I said, smiling and a little embarrassed.
“Would you like to suck my cock?”
“Yes” I said immediately. You kissed me as I get your pants off. I rubbed your cock through your boxers feeling it get hard underneath my touch. You took your boxers off and got on your knees. You moved forward so you were straddling my face and held your cock very close to my lips. I opened my mouth and stuck out my tongue waiting for you to place your cock into my mouth.
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You place the tip of your head on the tip of my tongue and I start to lick you. I tilt my head forward trying to get more in my mouth. You help and push more of your cock into my eager mouth. My tongue licking around your shaft as you thrust in and out of my mouth. One of my hands resting on your chest, the other gently playing with your balls.
“Are you enjoying sucking my dick?”
“Hmmmm.” I responded, your dick muffling my answer, but I didn’t stop sucking.
“Is your pussy getting wet?”
“Mhmm.”
“I can’t hear you.” You continue thrusting in and out of my mouth.
“Mmmm.”
“I’ll take that as a yes.” I lift my head, allowing your cock to go down my throat.
“Oh God.” I hear you say. You start thrusting faster. My hips start bouncing slightly.
“Do you want me to play with you?”
“Mhmmhmm.”
“What?” you say playfully.
“Mmm.” My answer vibrates your dick and my hand runs down your chest to your leg and squeezes hard.
“I guess you don’t want any pleasure.” You say quietly laughing. I moan and grab the very base of your dick as you are thrusting and I squeeze slightly, giving me time to move my head off of your dick to answer your question.
“Yes, please. Play with me.” You chuckle and I eagerly take your dick back into my mouth. Licking the shaft and pulling your dick deeper into my mouth and down my throat. You sigh at the good feeling. You reach your hand behind you and start stroking my clit through my panties. I moan immediately and my body relaxes at the pleasant feeling.
“You are wet, my little slut.”
“Mmm.” I moaned. One hand fondling my breast, the other moving my panties aside. Gently stroking my clit and the opening of my pussy. I’m still sucking your cock, and carefully fondling your balls and I feel them tighten.
“I wanna cum down your throat. Would you swallow all my cum, slut?” I moan in response and suck your dick harder, waiting for your cum to bust into my mouth. With two grunts and two fast thrusts you cum a big load in my mouth. I swallow your large load and suck out every drop. You pull out your dick and lean down closer to me. You push two fingers in my pussy and start kissing my neck. I moan and my hips hump your unmoving fingers. Your thumb rubbing against my clit. I bite my lip and try hard not to succumb to the pleasure you are giving me. You looked at my face and asked the first of ten more questions I had to endure before my release.
“Would you like me to move my fingers?”
“Yes!” I say without thinking. You gently start moving your fingers in and out of my pussy slowly. You look in my eyes and ask, “Is your left side more sensitive?”
It took me a moment to think, “I think so, yes.” You move your lips close to my left breast.
“Do you like biting?” I responded with a moan and a tilt of my head, wanting to watch what you were about to do.
You stuck out your tongue and moved it around my nipple in a circular motion. Then forcefully licked my nipple up and down. I sighed. Then you started sucking on my breast and you nibbled on my nipple and rolled it around with your teeth. I moaned loud and started pushing my hips downward on your slowly moving fingers. Then you stopped playing with my breast.
“Would you like it if I bit you in other places?”
“I would.” I said with a moan following; your thumb was speeding up on my clit. You came back up to my face and finally kissed me. Gently your lips pressed against mine. I wrapped my arms around your neck, keeping us close. You pushed your tongue through my lips and I moaned for a short moment. Then you surprised me by gently pulling my bottom lip in your mouth and carefully grazing it with your teeth. You release my lip and start biting my neck and my eyes roll as I let out a deep moan.
“6 more questions. Do you think you can last?”
“That’s 5 left, and yes I can.” I said with a smile and a hint of doubt.
“We will see.” Your fingers started curling up into my pussy, very lightly grazing my g-spot and my back arched. You worked your way down my body, kissing and biting me. Your face got down to my pussy. I could feel your breath on my clit and I started squirming. “
May I eat your pussy?” You whispered. The feeling of your warm breath over my clit made my body quiver. “Yes.” I whispered back.
I was worried I would cum within the first two seconds of feeling your tongue on my clit. You pulled your fingers out of my pussy and taste them.
“Mmmm, your pussy is so sweet, my slut.”
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I moaned. You lowered your face in between my legs, and then gently kissed my clit and my legs tensed. You took both your hands and placed them on my inner thighs, rubbing and grabbing them, almost like a massage. It relaxed me. Then you started sucking on my swollen clit. I moaned uncontrollably. The harder you sucked the louder I moaned. I was grinding my pussy against your face. You stopped sucking and asked question number 17.
“Are you close to losing control?”
“Yes, but please don’t stop.” You laughed and started flicking my clit with your tongue, then trusted your tongue in and out of my soaking wet pussy and I moaned loud as my whole body relaxed.
“Do you want my dick in your pussy?”
“Oh, yes, please!” You placed your hard cock against my wet and swollen clit. You placed the tip of the head just into the lips of my pussy and I started humping it hoping you’d slam it in me.
“May I fuck you?”
“Hell yes, right now.” You slammed your hard wide dick inside me and I screamed with pleasure. You pounded my tight wet pussy harder and faster with every thrust. I moaned repeatedly not sure how much longer I could last, hoping you would say the last question so I wouldn't have to hold on any longer.
“I’m gonna cum.” I heard you say almost out of breath. I bit my lip trying to last, but I moaned through it.
“Are you ready to cum?” And with that final question my body started to shake and my moans got longer. You kept pounding until with a hard thrust I came. My body continued to shake and I screamed “YES!” loud with pleasure. You groaned and pulled out of my pussy, and as you did I squirted all over your balls and legs as you came as high as my chest; a huge load all over my body. I continued shaking and moaning as you lay beside me holding my hand and kissing my face and cheek, trying to catch your own breath. The only thing I could manage to say when I cleaned up and calmed down from that intense orgasm was, “Did I make it through all 20?” You smiled, hugged me with one arm and said “Yes, you did. What do you want me to do?”
“Lay here with me?” I asked. “Sure.” You responded. I lay in your arms and we both fell asleep, happy, relaxed and relieved after our fun and intense game of 20 questions.
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