My book

This started as a D&D game back in the Summer of 2011. Unfortunately, the game never finished. I am in contact with the DM to get the rest of it, but he is the type that needs a lot of reminding; and I'm not able to contact him as easily now that we've both graduated.

That being said, the ending might not be as good as the start and middle. (Also, 'good' is a mater of opinion since my major wasn't writing) I would appreciate if those who are writing majors could send me tip on how to improve my style. Specifically: concise imagery, and proper use of the rarer punctuation types (dash, hyphen, M-dash, semicolon, etc.)