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Rated: E · Other · Other · #1806410
bad story start need help consructive reveiws or something please?
that night was darker than most. even with the battle between the mage and theif guilds no one could see in that darkness... no one but young lance shadow-fist. Me.

'haha this should be interesting' I said to his patroll.
'what's interesting? lance incase you have forgotten we dont all have the ability to "Sie"' said Pheonix Pure-Heart, as always curius to see what is going on.
'yea bro waz hapnin?' queried Drake my deputy in the pack always cool, and cocky...
' well let me show you' i replied and used my telekinetic power to broaden the vision of my purple and green eye to use all.
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