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Rough draft of my novel's 6th chapter. Please give me feedback! I need help with this! |
Morna didnât sleep that night. She lay in bed, heavy blankets pulled up to her chin as she sunk into the down comforter beneath their weight. Still, she felt as wide-awake as she did that afternoon. With an irritable tug at her sheets, she rolled over onto her side, snuggling deeper into her pillow. Jay was never one to withhold the Clanâs gold from his people. He made sure everyone was well-cared forâfed, watered, sheltered, clothed. When a reckless child smashed a pot of aloe extract in the Healersâ cabin the previous winter, Jay had not thought twice about importing two new jars from the South to replace the one theyâd lost. This hadnât saved the child from his motherâs wrath, of course, but it did save another group of idiotic Fire spirits who had been experimenting with black powder. Finally, Morna could stand it no longer. She had to take a walk. Pushing her covers aside, she was immediately greeted by a blast of icy air, but ignored it and pulled on her cloak and shoes. Perhaps she would visit the Viewing Room again. Something about it was rather calming, and it always had a strange scent to it that Morna liked. Probably the herbs the Seers used. Sheâd been dying to know what they were ever since sheâd pulled back the corner of the spelled package. None of her herbs ever came wrapped in embroidered silkâblue silk, no less. Whatever they were, they must have been rare⌠or dangerous. Maybe both. Morna tip-toed down the path leading from her cabin. The Viewing Room was the closest building to the Clanâs defensive perimeter, which consisted mainly of a colossal grey-stone wall bordered by a moat of Ever-Oil. Ever-Oil was a modern miracle in the Warriorsâ eyes. It was developed by a Spellcaster with an extreme case of pyromania, and one cup of the stuff could burn five times hotter than the largest fire anyone in the clan could procure. Also, like its name, Ever-Oil burned forever. The only ones who could put it out were high-ranking members of the Scouts and Warriors. The Viewing Room was a mass of shadows against the stone wall, and Morna breathed a sigh of relief. The night was cold, and she didnât want to be outside any longer than she had to. As she reached the ornate wooden door, Morna paused at the sound of voices from within. At first, they were just murmurs, but then a sharp voice cut through the others. ââhave been crossing our borders with nothing but the clothes on their back, scared for their lives! Something must be done, Alpha Shadows!â Morna froze. Alpha Shadows? Only foreigners called Jay Alpha Shadows. Everyone else simply called him âAlpha Jayâ or âAlphaâ. Morna ducked beneath the windowsill, curiosity winning out over fear of being discovered eavesdropping by the Alpha. âWhy did Alpha Red Moon not come in your place, then?â Jayâs voice rumbled. âIf refugees from Setsurao are indeed fleeing to your territory, why have they not sent word to us?â âOur Clan has sent word to yours countless times, along with Twilight and Seven Fangs. We cannot house Setsurao and the Azuretei on our own.â The foreignerâs voice rose in exasperation. âIn his most recent letter, Alpha Raisin expressed his concern that Mairon had won your Clan over in their campaign against the rest of us.â âI received no word of war from the Clans,â Jay said tightly. âNor did I get wind of trouble from Earth and Wind.â âWell, that last is a relief,â commented the foreigner. âMairon gives us enough trouble without stealing our closest allies. But you heard nothing from Earth, you say?â Jay snorted. âSetsurao has not been friendly to us since my father killed the delegate the sent to us twenty years past. That sickness of a man couldnât hold his tongue about my motherâs Wind heritage. Father tore the foolâs tongue out. I thought nothing of it.â âYou are as hot-blooded as he.â âSo Iâve been told. However, your news is disturbing. Red Moon is our closest ally. Be assured we would not ignore a request for aid.â There was silence, and Morna tilted her head closer to peer in the window. Jay sat cross-legged on the floor across from a man garbed in red-and-gold traveling robes. A Red Moon Clan warrior, then. Two black-veiled Seers knelt on the floor as wellâone behind Jay and the Red Moon warrior. âI fear our communications have been intercepted,â Jay continued. âI suspect inside work.â âWhich is why Alpha Raisin did not meet you himself,â continued the foreigner. âLet your traitor believe he goes unsuspected. Spook him, and he may set off a deadly chain reaction.â âMy thoughts exactly.â The veiled Seer behind Jay suddenly raised herâMorna was almost positive this Seer was femaleâhead from the floor. She whispered something to the Alpha, and suddenly both Jay and the foreigner looked at the window. Directly at Morna. Morna yelped and sprang to her feet, feeling her hamstrings protest painfully at the sudden abuse. She wasnât sure if the Alpha had seen her face clearly in the gloom, and vigorously hoped she could get far enough away before they had a chance toâ The door opened just as Morna pulled her cloak free of the hedge, and there was no denying it now: They had seen her. There was the dull shiink of metal on metal as the Red Moon warrior drew his sword. Mornaâs heart pounded against her ribcage, and she forced down the bile burning the back of her throat. If they suspected her of treason, Jay would definitely put the Clanâs safety above Mornaâs life. However, much to her surprise (and immense relief), Jay held out his arm to stop the warrior. âThe Seers told me you would learn of this before you should, Morna,â he said, smiling. âHowever, I thought the Viewing Room would be the last place you would wander to at midnight.â âI couldnât sleep,â muttered Morna shakily. âI went for a walk.â âYou have had âsleeping troublesâ for several weeks now, yes?â asked the Seeress beside Jay. âYou made quite a mess in here last night.â Morna frowned. She was fascinated by the power of the Seers, but their arrogance got on her nerves. âThank you, Kaera,â the Alpha said tightly. âPlease wake my sister, and bring her to me.â The Seeress snorted, but jogged off into the night nonetheless. âCome inside, Morna,â said Jay, as the foreigner sheathed his sword. âWe have much to discuss.â She nodded, following the Alpha as enthusiastically as she would her executioner. *** âYou are lucky, Morna,â Jay said once the girl was seated. âLucky the Seers are accurate, I mean. Had they seen someone else...â His sentence trailed off threateningly. Morna hung her head. âIâm sorry, Alpha,â she said softly. âI meant no harm by it.â Jay passed her a mug of hot tea. âI would like to introduce you to Seoras,â he said, nodding to the Red Moon warrior beside him. âAs you heard, he is from the Red Moon Clan with word from Raisin.â âYes, I heard,â admitted Morna. âHearing and understanding are quite different.â Jay leaned forward slightly. âYou have not been told of our Clanâs relations with the other countries for a reason.â Morna nodded. Healers were, as a rule, left out of such conversations so as not to affect their judgment of those they treated. âAnd not for the reason you think,â he continued. âI have withheld many things from both you and my sister because I felt it to be in the best interest of the Clan.â There was a sudden rapping on the door, and Morna jumped. âAlpha!â called Kaeraâs voice. âYour permission?â âGranted. Enter.â The door opened silently on its hinges, and Kaera entered two steps behind a very tired-looking Hazel. âWhat is the meaning of this, Jay?â she grumbled. âCanât it wait until morning?â âIâm afraid not,â replied Jay. He gestured to the seat beside Morna, which Hazel took gratefully. âThis is Seoras, Warrior of the North Star Scouts. Seoras, my younger sister Hazel.â Seoras bowed respectfully to Hazel, but she remained seated. âNorth Star? Those are Red Moon Scouts.â âYes, Lady Hazel,â affirmed Seoras. âI have come on behalf of Alpha Raisin to deliver news of our neighbors to the East and South.â Hazel did not bow her head, but merely nodded her head. âAnd I suppose this ties in with why my brother felt it necessary to pull me out of bed at midnight?â âIt does,â replied Jay sharply. âThere is a traitor in our midst; maybe more than one. Please donât interrupt, Hazel,â he said suddenly, cutting his sister off. âTime is against us at the moment, so Iâll just get straight to it: Iâm sending you and Morna away. I must meet with Raisin in person, and I will not risk leaving the two of you in the Shadow Clan.â âWhat?!â cried Hazel, all signs of exhaustion dissipating from her face. âNo! Iâm in no more danger than anyone else, and the people will want to see some signs of normalcy in the Clan!â âI wonât go,â said Morna stubbornly. âI will not leave my position as Healer.â Jay stood swiftly, towering over both girls. âYou will do as I say!â he barked. âHazel, you are truly a fool if you believe you are equal to anyone else in this Clan, and Morna, you are not a full Healer yet. You will do well to remember your place. Both of you are still children in the eyes of the Four Clans, and until you are seen as otherwise, you have no voice in this Clanâs Melody!â âThe Shadow Clanâs Melody is flat in comparison to the Song of Ages,â snarled Hazel, âin which I do have a voice!â âAs does the babbling madman,â Seoras replied acidly. âSister to the Alpha or no, you would do well to learn the values of silence!â Hazel gaped at him furiously, but said nothing more. âWe are not dealing with amateurs here,â said Jay finally. âFor something of this magnitude to go unnoticed for so long, there must be a grander scheme beneath what we see. You and Morna have made fast enemies with Fiekra, and by a happy coincidence, heâs in charge of communications between the clans. If anything happens to Kaji, you are next in line to be Alpha.â âWhat about Kras?â asked Hazel desperately. âKras is not of our fatherâs blood,â Jay said dismissively. âHe cannot lead the Clan. Morna, I would let you stay, but you know too much to remain in the Clan while I am away, and if Fiekra is involved, he will not simply leave you in peace while he sets his plans in motion.â Morna hung her head. âWhen do we leave, Alpha?â she asked softly. Jayâs eyes softened. âGet some sleep,â he said. âYou will have tomorrow to pack, and Iâll send Seoras to escort you to the West Shores of Azuretei at sundown.â |