Song In ELVISH!! Exciting!

I devised my own variation of the elvish language for use in a fantsy epic I'm working on (which will likely not be published on writing.com because I wan't to have it published by a publishing company so I can earn money from it).
My version of Elvish is meant to have a nice sound, so that I can write poems and poetry in it. This poem is written first in English, with an exact! Elvish translation below it. The elvish half is set to the tune of 'You take everything' by Linkin Park (best band ever!)

English:
Here she waits, the maiden of the elves,
the lady I have thousandfold die in protect of
in past lives i have died
a thousand battles
one war
one purpose
her life.

Elvish:
ici est el, lo fem du les elves (fem du les elves)
ette dje ai mourir pur el, pur el dje protege
danz lo pass dje mourir
mil guers
un guer
un reison
saa leif

What do you guys think? Oh, oh- by the way, the Elvish part begins with the tune from the CHORUS pf 'take everything.' so, when you read the first line, it's to the tune of 'take everything form the inside and throw it all away."
Enjoy ;)
and if anyone wants to use my version of Elvish in there stories, feel free to contact me for a (pretty)large glossary of words- as long as you do not profit from it, ie put in a book and get it published.