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-billwilcox
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First, Second Or Third Person
Recently, I accepted the challenge to write in the "Invalid Item" . Basically, a symmetrina is a long story made up of smaller sections that can stand alone with a theme that unites them. The tricky part of the contest was that the first and last sections were to be written in the first person, with the second and second to last written in the second person. All other sections were to be written in the third person. Impossible you say? No, not really, if you make sure to pay close attention to the details.
Deciding if a story should be told with "I said, you said, or he/she said" can be daunting to many writers. There are pros and cons to each person. Let me give you some examples so we are all talking about the same thing.
Third Person, also called Omniscient: "Damn them all to the seven hells of Anthion," Klempf yelled, as he took another direct hit. His head throbbed from being thrown against the control panel. A small trickle of red blood ran down between his blond eyebrows.
Second Person: "Damn them all to the seven hells of Anthion," you yelled, as your ship took another direct hit. Your head throbbed from being thrown against the control panel. A small trickle of red blood ran down between your blond eyebrows.
First Person: "Damn them all to the seven hells of Anthion," I yelled, as my ship took another direct hit. My head throbbed from being thrown against the control panel. A small trickle of red blood ran down between my blond eyebrows.
As you can see, each paragraph has a distinctly different flavor.
Second person is very seldom used in fiction. To me, it seems to be distancing when someone keeps saying, "You, you, you." It lacks involvement of the characters in the story. Don't get me wrong, it can be used in a story, but it must be done very carefully.
The most frequently used persons are first and third.
First person has the advantage of being very personal. "I did this. I did that." The reader will know exactly what the character is thinking and what they believe, even if the story shows the character is wrong. One of the disadvantages is that the reader doesn't know anything that the character doesn't know. If a character is standing in one room, he doesn't know what is happening anywhere else. You couldn't say, "Darek stood in the living room, unaware that Jim was in the garden, with a rifle aimed at Darek's chest." That would be third person. Now you could say, "I stood in the living room facing the bay window. A glint of light from something in the garden caught my attention. Too late, I realized the glint came from a rifle scope, the bullet ripped into my chest, and the world darkened." This would have to be the end of the story, because there wouldn't be anyone left to tell the story, unless you have the character's ghost continue.
With first person you must be very careful to stay in each characters head, and know only what they know. This can be expanded if you jump from one person to another. However, you must be sure that the readers knows whose head you're in. It's easy to confuse the reader, and just a little too much of this will have your reader lost, frustrated and putting your book on the shelf forever.
Third person is the easiest to use; at least that's what many writers, including myself, think. Third person allows you to know everything. That's why it's also called the omniscient view. You are like a god, and know everything that everyone in the story knows, plus everything going on in their universe. If you want the reader to know that Jim is in the garden with a gun, you can just say so. You don't need Jim to shoot, or have someone else see Jim. It allows you to paint your story with a much broader brush.
A good writer can, with a lot of work, combine these different views, but it must be done just right and for a reason. I suggest staying with one view throughout a story, just to make things easier on you, and the reader.
Find out what voice you like to write in. Do what I did above. Write two or three pages of a story in each person, and see which you enjoy the most, and which sounds most natural to you. Which person you choose may even vary from story to story.
Whatever person you choose to write in is up to you, just be sure to write  .
Until, next time  ,
billwilcox
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W.D.’s Picks of the Week
Here are a few of the entries that were in the "Invalid Item" . Be sure to congratulate these writers for attempting the impossible--Read & Review.
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