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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*PenB* First Impressions:

This was a very useful paper! I guess I’ve read too many horror stories because I expected there to be an evil twist. The paper might appear to be helpful, but there would be some kind of negative outcome - he would get the job but have a nasty accident on his first day. He would meet the love of his life only to find that she was dying of an incurable disease. Something along those lines. None of that actually happened. You kept the story positive all the way to the end, when Charlie no longer needed the paper and was ready to pass it on. To be fair, he never needed it much to begin with. A couple of gentle pushes in the right direction, and his life pretty much worked out for the best on its own. Charlie was a lucky man!


*PenG* Suggestions:

The story was very well written and I only spotted one tiny error:

“So, what do you have to lose,” said the stranger.
I realise this was probably meant as a rhetorical question, but it is still a question and so requires a question mark at the end rather than a comma. And technically, I suppose it should also say “asked the stranger” for the same reason.


*PenP* Final Thoughts:

I liked the use of the blue suit, representing transition, responsibility, and legacy. At the beginning, a man in a blue suit gave the paper to Charlie who was at a low point in his life. Thirty years later, Charlie wore the blue suit himself to become the guide for someone else. Charlie was once in need of the magic and now became part of it, serving a greater purpose. It was beautifully done to bring the story to a satisfying close.




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