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 |  | Harshest Critic  [ASR] She's my best friend, my harshest critic.  |
| (4.5)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  Hello, Sarah Rae! INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:  I enjoyed reading your "Harshest Critic" poem this afternoon and again this evening. Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:  Happy Writing.Com Anniversary day and month! I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging. It is meant to be honest and respectful, in accordance with WDC guidelines. I found your poem in the "Anniversary Reviews" forum today, reviewed by someone else that I respect. He rewarded it a nice amount of stars, and your title caught my attention, and your description interested me further, so I clicked and read your poem. Because I enjoyed it, I decided to do a review for you. I loved that you included both your best friend side and your critic side throughout the poem. Almost all of us have this experience of being our own harshest critic, but not everyone has the experience of being his or her own best cheerleader. I was glad that you had the positive side too, and liked the juxtaposition of the two types of internal voices. I liked the rhyming elements in the first, third, and fourth stanzas. My favorite line was the "She tells me everything about me is worthwhile." That is a lovely thing to hear about oneself. I thought you did a great job with explaining the two voices at the end of your poem. I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your "Harshest Critic" poem. I appreciated that you were awarded a lovely orange awardicon for this emotional poem. I thought the personal, and emotional genres you selected for this poem were appropriate matches for it. I wondered if you had written this poem for any particular prompt, contest, or challenge here? Overall, I found your poem to be highly relatable and emotional. I found myself hoping that your encouraging voice is winning in your life and mind nowadays. If you visit my blog and search for "self talk," I have several posts about this that you might find helpful. IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER: In the spirit of helpfulness, and because of the requirements of a new reviewing challenge I joined recently, I have some little suggestions to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section. Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!   The best thing I can say to improve your poem is to add a rhyme in the second stanza, to follow the same format as the stanzas before and after it. I found myself reading and rereading and wondering if I was missing something (where was the rhyme?). I'd recommend choosing third genre, as we are allowed three, and people do search by genre here. Perhaps "experience," "womens," "psychology," or "biographical” might be nice options to consider? There's a drop down list, as you know, because you had to use it to select “emotional" and "personal." I don't have it memorized; those are just some suggestions. The actual list will probably be more helpful. Just to show it's not only me who recommends this, moderator Schnujo's Giving Away GPs  shared on the news feed in a comment on 2/21/2025 that “SM has told me, himself, that the #1 way people search for things to read on WdC is through the genre search, so if you aren't filling out all 3 genres, you are literally missing out on readers.” [On the very slim chance that you don't already know this, SM is our StoryMaster here, and definitely in the know.] If you want to see the note and scroll down to see her whole comment, here’s the link: "Note: View this Note". It's always nice for me as a reader to have the poetry form and line count listed below the poem, perhaps in a "notes" section. I don't know how long it took me to start doing that, but once I did, readers responded favorably. So I'd recommend adding that information beneath your poem. It seems like your poem is a sonnet, minus the strict syllable count, one stanza's rhyme and plus an extra line at the bottom, but perhaps it's a different form that I am not familiar with? It might help you get more future readers if you added a thumbnail picture to your story, if your membership level allows that. Pictures are attention getting and could help your story stand out in a list of search results. I think a picture of someone who appears to be critical or a plus and minus sign would be good, if you want a couple of ideas.As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't. CONCLUSION:  I enjoyed reading your emotional, personal poem, and empathized with your sentiments that you expressed in it. Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community! Once again, happy anniversary day and month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance, and may the Lord bless you and all that you do, during your anniversary month, and always! PWheeler   A SuperPower Reviewers Choice review!  Positive Hearts  A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group"  The B.E.A.R. Fund  ROAR   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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