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 |  | I Am Thankful For  [E] A child's list of things he is grateful for and the stuff he's thankful not to have.  |
| (5.0)  My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM"Anniversary Reviews"   THE POEM A poem as seen through a toddler's eyes.  WHAT I LIKED I really enjoyed the voice of the tone. The poet caught the simplicity of life at an early age.  STRUCTUREThis is poem with an AABBCCDD...etc rythme scheme. MECHANICSI did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice rhythm when read out loud. If anything, I might suggest using WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes to read. DESCRIPTIONSI liked: "'Cause veggies are gross and make my insides queasy." This honest sentiment made me laugh. Most toddlers share this feeling that veggies are gross, but I think it's the raw honesty that resonates with readers. Who has felt this way and held back from being honest because you don't want to hurt someone's feelings. Ah, conundrum when we grow up! PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONSThe opening engages the reader, putting them in the moment, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. I enjoyed the touch of honesty and smiles this poem brought. 
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