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Fifth go around on Promptly Poetry Challenge
by Rainy Day Sox Author Icon
         Review for entry/chapter: "Dansa" Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, Sox!

I’m here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge.

Having bragged about the burst of inspiration born of sheer annoyance (Mom, would you please use earbuds *Laugh*) I was curious to see what anyone else would come up with for this form.

You've done a tongue-in-cheek "oroboros" type of thing here, which was enough to make us chuckle by the end as you wobbled cheerfully through.

Unfortunately... You didn't quite follow the requirements. You probably don't want to hear this, and I know I had a hard time wrapping my head around the form (wrapping the form around my head? *Crazy*) But anyway, I suggest you take a sharp look at the example poem Lilli was kind enough to provide. It'll show you where the repeats are and how the rhyming goes...

No judgement, though, literally, so no sweat. Whatever's easiest. If you don't think you want to see another "dansa" as long as you live, no one will object *BigSmile*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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