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| (5.0)  My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM A poem that takes you on a journey through the seasons through lovers' eyes.  WHAT I LIKED I liked the progression of the seasons and how love grew throughout.  STRUCTUREThis is an english sonnet following the traditional ABAB CDCD EFEF GG rythme scheme. MECHANICSI did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to make it easer on the eyes. DESCRIPTIONSI liked: "In ample fields of fragrant grasses, Rainbow colors, nature's bedspread" What a rich description using a good economy of words to paint the picture. I can easily visual a field of grass with blooms, dandelions, poppies, a colorful flower array, and it sets a table of hope and anticipation. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONSThe opening draws the reader in with blooming flowers, and encourages them to keep to find out what happens next. The title fits the poem. Good beats and nice storytelling.
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