Hello Joseph,

my name is Tiggy and I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest" . Thanks for entering! Please bear in mind that my comments and suggestions are only my opinion. Other reviewers might see it differently.


First Impression:

Ten out of ten for originality! You’ve hit a nerve with this little tale. The use of AI in writing (and reviewing, for that matter) has bothered me for a while. I think it’s cheating, but more importantly, why would anyone want to? It’s fun to write and I for one don’t want to outsource it. Neither did the character in your story. He never invited the chatbot into his life; it just seemed to appear and once it was there, he couldn’t get rid of it again.

It was clear how the prompt has inspired this story. DeDe learned from the details, as she pointed out several times, and her doing so hindered the writer’s progress rather than speeding it up or making it better. Of course the readers never got to read DeDe’s efforts at writing so can’t judge if it was any good, but the plot didn’t require that - this was all about the frustration the writer experienced, and while the plot was quite simple, I could imagine that kind of conversation going on in real life.

The story was almost entirely told in dialogue, and you captured the two different voices quite well. The writer spoke like a human whereas DeDe kept repeating the same phrases, and in my head, she had a robot voice that didn’t sound quite human. By the nature of it, the story was a little light on descriptions, and I wonder if there might have been an opportunity to open with some setting - a dimly lit study, a modern office, the writer curled up on the sofa with a laptop perched on his knees - anything to give the readers a picture of him while all of this was going on. Personally, I think it would have also worked to weave a bit of this into the dialogue, like having him bang his hand on the desk or running a hand through his hair, or something like that, but if you wanted it all to be dialogue, I understand why you wouldn’t interrupt it with dialogue tags.


Suggestions:

I noticed a few small errors:

A chatbot is A software or computer program
The second “a” shouldn’t be capitalised.

DeDe you are a stubborn little booger ain't you.
You need a couple of commas in that sentence, one after “DeDe” to set off the direct address, and once before “ain’t you” to separate the main statement from the tag question at the end.

It seems to be the better of the three.
“Better” refers to one of two things. Since there are three options here, it should be “best”.

You're primitive habits
That should say “Your”. "You're" is a contraction of "you are", “your” means belonging to you.


Final Thoughts:

This was a fun story to read (and it seemed like it was fun to write, too!) which addressed quite a topical problem which, although exaggerated, seemed quite realistic. You used less than half the allowed word count and I think if you expanded on this a little with some details (there’s that word again - my name is not DeDe, I swear!) the readers would be able to imagine the writer and the setting better which would make it more relatable.