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Review #4810622
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Raised for Us Open in new Window. [E]
A haiku for Easter 2009!
by Soldier_Mike Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A poem that examines the Easter mystery.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The poem is very succinct and to the point.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku that follows the 5/7/5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "death is defeated" This really is the *Heart* of the story when it comes to Easter. It's showing a new way forward.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is reflective of the poem, giving us a hint of what to expect. The topic matter gives the haiku depth. The revenant tone of the poem comes across which is no easy feat when words and syllables are limited. A great poem for the upcoming Easter season.

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