Hello, Odin's Path,

Here is a review for your "The Kraken" 

Comments and Observations:

What an exciting and scary poem! The tension build-up throughout is superb. Plus, the increase in pacing toward the end makes the poem even more exciting to read.

Good lines and descriptions with sensory details throughout had me sitting at the end of my chair, such as: "But then came a BOOM / From the depths so violent." And "The water boiled / And thrived with pain."

The AABB rhyme scheme is consistent, natural, and very readable.

I also like the narrative arc in the poem that begins quietly and eerily, and flows into its scary conclusion. The idea that the character, unknowingly, awakened a sleeping beast of legend at the bottom of the water is chilling and exciting at the same time.

With all this action, I couldn't help but wonder about the protagonist. Why was he where he was? What were his thoughts? Was he or wasn't he skeptical of legends and old tales?

Then, I'm wondering if it could be possible to give more emphasis to the ending as the protagonist was getting pulled under by the Kraken. Such as, "Awoke the monster / That could not be slain" could be phrased a bit more strongly, maybe like "The slumbering beast / Stirred once again." This could lead to more emphasis to the last moments of the protagonist with exciting or chilling definitions.

Overall, I like the thrill, the sense of danger, and the well-crafted eeriness in your poem

Best wishes with your work.






My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .