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 | Chili By Candlelight  [13+] A young married couple have an explosive evening, in more ways than one.  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: I felt for the characters in this story, both of them. The way they acted reminded me a LOT of my partner and me. He can usually make me laugh when I’m upset (and it is so annoying when I want to be cross with him but he won’t let me!) but when that doesn't work, he knows to back away very carefully. He, too, has the tendency to speak before the words have filtered through his brain and has been known to mumble, “I’ve said the wrong thing…” when I explode  Here, it was a real explosion that saved poor Ray when he definitely did say the wrong thing, but before Laura could punch him in the face, the chili came to his rescue. I would imagine that he was never so glad to find a complete mess in the kitchen because it took her mind off being mad at him. He seemed to be the kind of person who likes to live dangerously, judging by the words that came out of his mouth.I identify most strongly with Laura. Not that I would admit to being a witch, but sometimes my mood isn’t as cheerful as I would like. Laura had a good reason to be distracted and grumpy though - the pregnancy was going to put a strain on their finances and she feared this would extend to their relationship. But thanks to the exploding chili, they had the opportunity to take a breath before they could say or do anything they would regret.  Suggestions: The story was well written and I only noticed a couple of small errors: every time you want it to use I think that was meant to say, “want to use it”. “Off course not!” “Of course not!”  Final Thoughts: You used those prompts very well. I didn’t scroll down to check what they were before I started reading the story, and I chuckled at a few of them, like 'by law, we'll have to impound your broom' while also cringing and expecting the worst reaction from her. You said this was fun to write and it comes across in this story, but I would imagine it was quite tough to weave all those quotes into the tale in a way that made sense. A great story, I enjoyed the read!    A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" This review is affiliated with The B.E.A.R. Fund , a community project that let's you earn exclusive merit badges just by reviewing! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 03/26/2025 @ 11:11am EDT