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 | His Favorite Time  [E] His favorite time, based on a photo prompt  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: That was a very sweet story. You introduced the main character by his personality alone; he remained without a name through the whole story and yet I felt I got to know him very well. He enjoyed fishing in the early hours when the sun hadn’t come up yet, and he loved the silence - or so he thought. In fact, you described that silence so well that I could hear the plop of a line in the water which disturbed it for a moment. The scene was very peaceful and I could feel the calm he must have experienced. He used those moments to remember previous occasions when he was fishing in that spot, alone or with his family when his children were little and growing up. Those memories were precious, and again, you did a great job describing each personality. It’s funny to think that three children who grew up together could be so different, but he made sure to note their similarities as well. It was nice that he liked their partners as well, and, of course, his grandchildren. That was really the main part of the tale, the experiences he once had with his children now being repeated with the younger generation, and that’s when he came to realise that it wasn’t the silence he cherished but the family he shared it with, or not, when the little ones were being noisy, but that was part of the fun.  Suggestions: The story was very polished and I only noticed one tiny error. Hardly worth mentioning, but since I’m here… It seemed like all the world was as peace I think that was meant to say, “was at peace”.  Final Thoughts: I have read too many horror and otherwise unsettling stories so I was worried at first that something terrible might happen to him, or that his reflections might reveal that one of his children or his wife had passed away, or something similar. I was glad to find that wasn’t the case. All his memories were happy ones, and when his family came to join him, they all had a lovely time. You mentioned a photo prompt in the description and I wonder if this story was written for a contest on Writing.Com and what that picture might have been. This is quite an old story so you probably don’t remember, but for future stories, it might be a good idea to either use the image as a thumbnail or briefly describe it at the end of the story. It’s just an idea, and not knowing what it was didn’t make the story any less enjoyable. A great read!    A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" This review is affiliated with The B.E.A.R. Fund , a community project that let's you earn exclusive merit badges just by reviewing! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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