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 | Dear Me - 2014  [E] This is a letter to myself outlining my goals for the year.  |
| (4.5)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  Hello, Carly! INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:  I enjoyed reading your "Dear Me - 2014" letter every time I read it, including today. Your writing kept my attention and I read all the way through to the end. Congratulations to you on completing eight whole years of the Contest Challenge! "The Contest Challenge" It's wild to think that the Contest Challenge hadn't even started yet when you wrote this letter. MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:  Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I read this "Dear Me - 2014" letter of yours sometime in the past and enjoyed it, but didn't have time to review it right then, so I flagged it for an anniversary review (meaning I saved the link to it in a special "March" file.  ). I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging. Your "Dear Me - 2014" letter is full of self love, care, and uplifting ideas. I enjoyed reading it and learning more about what your writing life and writing.com were like back in 2014. I hadn't even heard of writing.com yet at that time, though I wish I had. Your letter reminded me of the "Monthly Reading Challenge" that I used to enjoy until Minja had to retire it, presuming it's the same one. Perhaps it was a different one though. I really loved that challenge. Thankfully, Rachel aka Choconut  has her Rach's Reading Challenge now, which is equally awesome. I hadn't heard of "The Daily Muscle Stretch contest," but it sounds like a great one, even if it went from daily to monthly. I was glad that you were able to participate in it while it was still running. I thought you used the pink and green colors in the body of your letter well for emphasis and to make your goals, and the contests related to them, stand out well. I liked the purple that you used for your own name. I think that all of the color you used in this letter added to the creativity factor too. My favorite sentence pair was "I expect this year to be very productive. I see myself growing as a writer and as a reviewer." It was near the end and it was a great way to start wrapping up and summarizing your letter. I liked the positive language and visualization you used in it too. I thought you did a great job with the prompt / rules for the Official Dear Me letter contest. You were definitely under the word count maximum of 2,000 words, you listed your word count below your letter, you wrote the letter to yourself, you were encouraging and positive, yet realistic, and you employed some creativity too. Your image in the thumbnail picture seemed celebratory and like a good match for your "Dear Me - 2014" letter. I thought the "personal" and "writing" genres you selected for this poem were appropriate matches for it.IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER: In the spirit of helpfulness, and because of the requirements of a new reviewing challenge I joined recently, I have some little suggestions to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section. Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!   I think that this sentence needs something for both parts of it to be in agreement. Right now it looks like this:"You cannot simply say 'I want to build my confidence', I need to be specific about what that is." As the rest of the letter, as far as I noticed, was written from an "I" perspective, I'd recommend changing the opening "you" to "I." If you did that, the sentence would look like this: "I cannot simply say 'I want to build my confidence', I need to be specific about what that is." I'd recommend linking to the official Dear Me contest at the bottom, perhaps underneath your word count. It might help future readers, especially newbies, to find the contest and be more likely to participate in the future. I'd recommend combining these two sentences into one, and either having a colon instead of a period, or parentheses around the SMART words, and adding commas between the SMART words. Right now the two sentences look like this:"That is fine to say but goals need to be SMART. Specific Measurable Attainable Relevant and Time Bound." With the colon option, they would then look like this: "That is fine to say but goals need to be SMART: Specific, Measurable, Attainable, Relevant, and Time Bound." Also, I don't think you really need to capitalize the SMART words. If you didn't, and you still used the colon option, the sentence would change to this: "That is fine to say but goals need to be SMART: specific, measurable, attainable, relevant, and time bound." I like this last option best, personally, because it seems to flow the nicest when I read it. I think maybe this sentence has a typo, and that "keep" should be "keeps." That's super easy to change, should you choose to do so. Right now the sentence looks like this:"Doing websites like 750words.com keep track of my writing streak and I am bound and determined to pass my last highest streak of 82 days." If you made the change, it would look like this: "Doing websites like 750words.com keeps track of my writing streak and I am bound and determined to pass my last highest streak of 82 days." As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't. CONCLUSION:  I enjoyed reading your "Dear Me - 2014" letter , and empathized with your sentiments that you expressed in it, and hope you did achieve all of your goals that year, and that you do for this year too. Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community! Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance during your anniversary month, and always! PWheeler   A SuperPower Reviewers Choice review!  Positive Hearts  A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group"  The B.E.A.R. Fund   A Review to Congratulate You on Completing 8 Years of the Contest Challenge!: "The Contest Challenge"   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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