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 The Great Lights Open in new Window. [E]
One blaze is led away from her sisters to be tested by a star.
by robbie illos Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*PenB* First Impressions:

At first, I was wondering where you were going with this story, so I decided to sit back and enjoy the ride until I figured it out. The descriptions were excellent and I could imagine the setting very well, the deep trench, the five blazes that weren’t quite stars but close enough to make it easy to picture what they would have looked like. They had personalities of their own, the brightest one and her sisters, who didn’t feel jealous but rather took their sister’s brightness as inspiration. The star who had accidentally created them seemed to be doing a nice thing when she singled out the brightest to see if one day, she could become a star, but it took its toll on all of them as they didn’t like to be separated. In the end, they understood that the only way they could be together was by first all going their separate ways so they could grow individually before they could be reunited as stars. I hope I’ve got that right - that’s how I read it, anyway, but there might be other interpretations.


*PenG* Suggestions:

The story was beautifully written and I only have a couple of tiny suggestions:

She was admired by every man and every child and would often point their finger at that one light which shone the brightest.
I think this sentence would work better if you changed the second part to “who would often point their finger…”

simply being bounded by a promise of one day meeting again.
I believe that was meant to say, “bound by a promise”.


*PenP* Final Thoughts:

This was quite an inspirational tale. The five blazes together made a whole, but they could only grow when they were apart from each other, each finding their own path to becoming a star. It wasn’t just the brightest among them that got this opportunity; they could all do it, and one day, they would be united. A well written and very unique story. I enjoyed the read!




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