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 Review #4802576 |
 |  | A Fisherman's Tale  [E] Its giant body slinked just below the surface  |
| (5.0)  My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM A poem about a giant whale that finds a boat.  WHAT I LIKED I loved the adventure of the poem. I felt like I was a fly on the wall in the boat.  STRUCTUREThis is free form poem. There was no apparent rythme scheme. MECHANICSI did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and tells a good story. Nice use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes. DESCRIPTIONSI liked: "Then he slammed the hammer down on the water, and with a thunderous roar, freezing sprays rained down." This is an incredible visual which puts the reader right in the boat. It's easy to picture the hammer coming down. I can hear the massive splash and feel the water on the skin. That's 3 out of senses in one motion. Well done! PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONSThe opening quietly draws the reader and then puts them in the middle of the action with little notice. Well done! The title fits the poem well.   HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM"Anniversary Reviews"  An Angel Army Review
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