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The End of the World As We Know It Open in new Window. [13+]
The winds of change stir strange embers in a young boy's heart.
by Jeffrey Meyer Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*PenB* First Impressions:

I liked the beginning of this story, where the dad explained that it wasn’t the kids fault, it was just that he didn’t love their mother anymore. By implication, it wasn’t really her fault either. Later on, that seemed to change, and there was the customary screaming and laying blame that one would expect from a couple going through a divorce. But at least at first, it looked like it might be quite amicable.

I can’t speak from the experience of the child here; my parents were happily married for over 50 years and never seemed to say a bad word to each other, at least not that I could hear. I put my own kids through that experience though, and I know that they found it hard. The narrator’s emotions came across very well, albeit not in the way I expected. Yes, he did have questions and he was upset, but mainly he thought about how being married to someone should be easy. He didn’t conclude that he never wanted to get married in case it turned out bad, he just wanted to do better.


*PenG* Suggestions:

The story was very well written but I noticed a few small errors:

even that late in evening
There seemed to be a word missing, “in the evening”.

what I supposed to think
Again, just a missing word, “I was supposed”.

I went to asleep
“I went to sleep” or “I fell asleep”?


*PenP* Final Thoughts:

The paragraph where the narrator sat with his dad was beautiful and I read it a couple of times. The description of making the most of that one moment, being with his dad and just enjoying it despite the devastating news, was very well done. It was a sad story but the way you explained your experience made it a very good read.




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