\"Writing.Com
*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
BY ONLINE AUTHORS
Printed from https://writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4802365
Review #4802365
Viewing a review of:
 Discard After Use Open in new Window. [13+]
The first poem I ever wrote to completion in my life.
by Conrad Moriarty Author Icon
Review of Discard After Use  Open in new Window.
Review by J. M. Kraynak Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Access:  Public | Hide Review (?)
Hi, I just happened to see your question in the Newbie forum and thought I'd stop by to give a review. I'm not much of a solid judge of poetry, so I don't really have an in-depth approach to it. What I can offer is my honest opinion on the writing and I suppose though lacking the technical side of things, it can at least show you how an average consumer of poetry interprets your writing.

There's a line from a television series I would like to quote here:
         Vanessa Ives -Penny Dreadful ▼

I read this in its entirety before deciding to write this, and I must say, boy does that fit the bill throughout the whole thing. Really this is a good perspective from a more cynical vista, which is right up my alley.

Then the end comes. A very nice turn-around to this whole composition. The promise that a cycle continues is a lovely way to end it. After all, paper is a lovely compost medium and does in fact contribute a great amount of fertility to the grand scheme of things.

There are some rhymes sprinkled in here and there that flip-flop their locations in the verses so there's no real set pattern to it other than they are there. I don't however think it diminishes from the composition and actually adds more life to it. Overall, I enjoyed it. I apologize for not giving it a more technical analysis but that's not really something I'm much good at regarding poetry. What I can tell you is the verses are very nicely written and the eye rhymes, true and half rhymes were enjoyable.

Thank you for sharing this, it was a joy to read.

Sig for Angel Army
Writing.Com Signature Image for Upgraded Registered Authors!


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
   *CheckG* You responded to this review 02/25/2025 @ 6:03pm EST
Printed from https://writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4802365