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Given: Feb 25, 2025 at 5:54pm
Length: 1,712 Characters |
1,467 w/o WritingML
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THE POEM
A graphic depiction of a firestorm that consumes a community.
WHAT I LIKED
This is a very visual poem that is easy to picture as you read it. It's a topical poem as a firestorm as such just destroyed the west side of Los Angeles. It's a bit of a different poem, more dark, more intense, more in your face. In that regard, it really displays a darker, more emotional range and depth.
STRUCTURE
This is a dinggedichedt style of poetry. I am not familiar with it, but the explanation is in a dropnote which is very helpful for the reader. There is no apparent rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to visualize.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Raining down from on high, Red specks scattered on roofs as infected." Vivid and harsh, it puts the reader on the outer perimeter of the firestorm and makes them feel uncomfortable watching the destruction.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening puts the reader in the moment, and keeps them there, much like a crowd that stops by and watches a building burn. The title fits the poem well. Vivid expression that makes the heart pound. Well done!
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