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 Him. Open in new Window. [E]
A diary entry in the form of a metaphor about a crush.
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Review by J. M. Kraynak Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello, I saw this writing under the Newbie section and would like to take a few minutes to extend to you my welcome and offer you my thoughts.

I read this in its entirety before deciding to write this review and would like to preface this by stating first and foremost, I'm no poet. I'm likely not even a good judge for poetry. That said, I'm not going to do the usual deep dive I do into a writing, but rather just simply offer you my thoughts.

I want to say wholeheartedly, this is art. I'm a hopeless romantic. I love the romantic writers, Keats, Wordsworth, Clare, this is in my ballpark of what I like to read.

Like I said, I'm a poor judge of poetry but I can judge what it did to me as a reader. This really pulled on me. The cosmic sides of inexplicable infatuation is explored very well in your language.

I really enjoyed the lines of constellations, that was a brilliant image.

The only stylistic suggestion that I can offer to you here is your double and single hyphens for pause can be replaced with — by simply typing {emdash}.

Aside from that, I think you have a writing to be proud of. Well done, and I thank you for sharing it. I'll have to dig out my old poetry book and start studying a bit.

I look forward to reading more of your work, based off this writing, I must assume that it is sensational.

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