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 My Zombie Boyfriend.  Open in new Window. [E]
An entry for both the dark and twisted romance contest and the writing dead.
by St. Patrick's Sox Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings, Sox!

I'm here as a fellow member of I Write 2025.

Well, this was wonderful. When I saw the new contest, "dark romance," I cringed because I couldn't imagine what the host might want to see. I mean, I'm not going to write a 50 Shades *Shock2* *Vomit* *Laugh* You've led the way by writing something more whimsical and uplifting than creepy; indeed, I almost had a tear in my eye by the end.

You've captured the resurrection of the zombie mind, and left room for lots of potential sequels as Blondie tries to save her boyfriend who saved her.

If I had to make any suggestions (which I do... The Bear Fund, y'know) I would say you might need a touch more sensory engagement to make it especially vivid. At least, that's what they say to do. I think it's fine like this.

On a different angle, there might be room for more personal interaction and character development between Blondie and the guy, since you have a 2k limit. We barely know who he is.

Also, might as well flesh out *Wink* the subtitle and add a picture, though I guess the title is draw enough *Laugh* *ZombieHand* *Heartp*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *Writer*


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