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Review of Escape

Review by StephBee

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Rated: 13+

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My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

An introspective poem about the dark places of our minds.

WHAT I LIKED

A good succinct word choice leads to a strong voice throughout the poem.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no set rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "I touch my cold fingertips, to the back of my sweaty neck."
This is a vivid description that one reading the poem can easily imagine, but it also draws well on emotions. How do you feel with cold fingertips and a sweaty neck? Uncomfortable? Uneasy? Well done.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening paints a vivid picture which engages the reader, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. The ending is different for all of us. Very expressive.