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 Review #4800369 |
 | A Stiff Drink  [13+] My head pounds, I knew better but I still let you in.  |
| (5.0)  My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM A poem that expresses regrets using a stiff drink metaphor.  WHAT I LIKED I loved the last 2 lines. They really summed the theme and message of the poem.  STRUCTUREThis is free form poem. While there is a rythme, there is no set rythme scheme. MECHANICSI did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read on WDC. DESCRIPTIONSI liked: "The "Dear Jane" letter fills an empty glass," This is like a stab in the heart that I think goes a long way. The poem stirs up those nasty little hang over emotions that one has when something good goes bad and the above phrase really sums it. No one likes a Dear Jane/John letter. No likes an empty glass, yet we have these moments in our lives, hopefully to learn, grow, and mature as humans. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONSThe opening pulls the reader right in, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. Excellent expression. The poem finds balance well between regret and moving on.
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