Hello, Agape Novels, aka joshuapenick!


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

I enjoyed reading your "Battle Plan Against Wrong Thoughts" essay every time I read it, including today.

Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary day and month! I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging.

I perused your port for a bit and quickly found this item. Its title caught my attention. I have notes for writing a short book on this topic, so it's definitely one that interests me.

I call this an essay, for lack of a better term, it seems to be your personal notes. I wondered if they were gathered through research or a sermon or some other means?

My favorite line was the quote by Joey Miner (guessing on spelling). I'll have to look that author up.

I thought you did a great job with gathering some ideas to willing the battle against ungodly thoughts.

I appreciated that you included plenty of Bible verse references and kept your focus on honoring the Lord God. Philippians 4:6-9 is an especially helpful set of verses for this endeavor.

Your heart for the Lord shines through this essay and is admirable.

IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:

In the spirit of helpfulness, and because of the requirements of a new reviewing challenge I joined recently, I have three little suggestions to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section.

Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!

In this sentence, "1. Remember this Verse and stay it out load with thuizume and passion," I had to stop reading because I was like, "What in the word is thuizume?" I went to look it up in the dictionary, in case it was a word I didn't know. Then it dawned on me that maybe you meant "enthusiasm." If that's the case, I'd recommend that you change it to the correct spelling. If you meant something else, or it's a foreign word, you might want to explain it for future readers.

In this sentence, "Remember, that God said that he never allow more to come on to you than you can handler, that he always provides a way out." I think you meant "handle" instead of "handler." That's just a little typo and easy to fix. If you wanted to fix it, your new sentence would look like this:

"Remember, that God said that he never allow more to come on to you than you can handle, that he always provides a way out."

In this sentence, "5. Remind your self again that your Father, loves you and wants the best for you. Encourage your self, and encourage others so that you can will also be encourage." I think there are a few typos... usually "your self" is spelled out as one word, "yourself." Though it may not be wrong to have it separated out. The second half of the sentence is kind of hard to follow. I think maybe you meant, "so that you will also be encouraged." So I'll fix these and show you what the sentence would look like if you took my recommendations.

This is your new sentence with my recommendations: "5. Remind yourself again that your Father, loves you and wants the best for you. Encourage yourself, and encourage others so that you will also be encouraged."


As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't.


CONCLUSION:

I enjoyed reading your "Battle Plan Against Wrong Thoughts" essay, and empathized with your sentiments that you expressed in it and agree with your ideas for pleasing the Lord.

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

Once again, happy anniversary day and month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance during this New Year, your anniversary month, and always!

PWheeler










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