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 Dimensional War Open in new Window. [13+]
A story of World War 2 soldiers battling beings from another reality.
by Ricardo Pomalaza Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*PenB* First Impressions:

The premise of this story distantly reminded me of the Worldwar series by Harry Turtledove. It’s an interesting idea, although in this tale, you left the ending open. It wasn’t clear if the humans would be able to stop fighting each other and unite to fight the alien invaders. Common sense would suggest that they would be able to see the greater threat posed by the invaders - if they are a threat. They haven’t actually done anything hostile yet, but no doubt they will. The soldiers in this story didn’t stick around to find out what their intentions were.

You described the alien invasion very well which made it easy to imagine what the soldiers saw. The alien species was very interesting too, and I got the feeling that you have given this scenario a lot of thought. It made me wonder if this was part of a longer story. Don’t get me wrong, it works as a stand-alone short story, but the open ending suggested that you might have written more, or were planning to.


*PenG* Suggestions:

The story was well written and I only noticed a few small errors:

It had the appearance of a a metal basketball.
You have a double “a” in that sentence.

people had grown accustom to
“accustomed”

invaded by a new kind enemy
There seems to be a word missing,”kind of enemy”.


*PenP* Final Thoughts:

I’m not a sci-fi fan but the setting of this tale made it an interesting read. In fact, it was the short description that made me click on this story because I was curious what you would do with this idea. There was a lot of focus on the soldiers and their mission, especially at the beginning, which was quite detailed and seemed well researched. It was soon forgotten though when the aliens landed, but you brought it back to the soldiers and why they were there at the end. I, too, wondered if anyone would believe them when they reported what they had seen, but I assumed that this wasn’t an isolated occurrence and the aliens probably landed in other places as well. It was a good story that made me wonder how it might continue.




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