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 Into the Wind Open in new Window. [ASR]
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by Lizzie Winter's Fairy Author Icon
         Review for entry/chapter: "Oh So Delicious" Open in new Window.
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Greetings, Lizzie!

I remembered you’re part of the PPC5 challenge and thought I’d find one of your entries to review as a fellow member.

This is a yummy poem... And now I'm hungry for a simple, classic dish of Italian spaghetti *Hungry*

You've painted your scene well, engaging our senses with the smell of garlic, the flavor of cheese and tomato sauce, and the sight of warm bread cleaning the plate. It's a deeply relatable moment for all of us; my mom and I love a good pasta dinner.

The free verse is conversational, whimsical and creative, as we spot a couple of accidental rhymes which lend a flow to the piece.

You've misspelled the word "fare" as it relates to food in the 13th line. Also, a line count at the bottom is nice to help Lilli quickly see the requirements have been met. I can hardly remember the prompt for that week; was it the "favorite food" prompt? Perhaps you should add a little note about it at the bottom, even just for your own reference. I know Lilli adds them all to a "quick list" which we can look at if we fall behind later in the year.

A perfectly scrumptious snapshot of a luxuriously simple dinner for one. I really enjoyed the tactile bliss you've shared with us here.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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