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Hi Gerritdunn, This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if this woman will approach the man she notices on the plane. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a woman is caught in a embarrassing situation. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention: 1)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader. The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job. ![]()
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