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 Ghost Peppers Chapter 1 Open in new Window. [E]
This is the first chapter in book one, Ghost Peppers.
by Jeff Sturgeon Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Jeff,

This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with curiosity as Penny has become a detective. The reader is wondering what has brought her to this accomplishment. They will read on to find out. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your main characters and plot very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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