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 Mating Dance Open in new Window. [E]
A prose poem about the perils of relationships.
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Review of Mating Dance  Open in new Window.
Review by Dave Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings, Brandon!

Welcome to this wondrous writing community. I noted your introduction on the "Noticing Newbies" Open in new Window. forum and wanted to offer a few observations in the interest of friendly hospitality and constructive support. Of course, they are nothing more than one person's opinions, so take them or leave them for whatever you think they may be worth.

TITLE:

The title of a composition is like the marquee on a theater. If there is nothing to spark some interest, the prospective reader is probably not going to enter.

The sign on this entrance invites that random browser to witness a persuasive ritual common, in one way or another, to all living beings.

FORM & STRUCTURE:

Your selection of the hybrid Prose Poem ( https://www.poetryfoundation.org/articles/160909/prose-poetry-as-rebellion ) clearly demonstrates your knack for linguistic charm.

IMAGERY:

Imagery is the lifeblood of a poem. Like a craftsman carving, molding, painting, and polishing wood, stone, clay, or some other material, the poet uses words to shape and paint pictures which present some lyrical impulse or spiritual truth. Rather than TELLING the audience about those feelings, the poet SHOWS the impressions through distinct images that project emotional overtones and associations with other images and events. In this way, the poet stirs an emotional response from the reader.

The specificity of details quickly engages your reader and propels him along that road with your narrator.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:

Art happens in two places: in writers' minds as they create it, and in readers' minds as they perceive it. Creative writers explore possibilities through a lens colored by past experience and share them with an unseen audience. They call upon a unique reservoir of such enlightenment, conceptual skill and innovative research to evoke some spiritual reaction from your audience--be it joy, melancholy, shock, or any of a thousand others.

The dynamic presentation of this ritual had me captivated from beginning to end.

If you are interested in learning more about the craft of composing poetry, or merely chatting with a few like-minded wordsmiths, we would love to have you join our discussions in "The Poet's Place " Open in new Window. group.

Here's wishing you fair winds as you continue to navigate this universe known as Writing.Com.

Let the creativity flow from your soul! *Cool*
Dave
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