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 Gruen Transfer Open in new Window. [E]
Eight line poem about confusion when shopping
by Sumojo Author Icon
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Well, I learned what the Gruen Transfer is, and affect on consumer shopping experience. In light of this, I can reread the poem and find the humor that takes the subject to the absurd, as a sort of commentary on the weird mall layout/shop designs. I can't visualize place, which might take longer than an eight line poem, but would be worth discovering from this perspective.

I'm going to make an assumption on the misspelling of c(h)rystal, adding to the commentary that this transfer place relating to what you came in for is replaced by something so enticing that it is unto itself, given a different name. If not, it's a misspell. *Laugh*

Am I living under a rock, because as prompt I'd be confused? However, if I don't take this poem too literally, it could imply one's relation to life like a Gruen Transfer, where we sometimes gets lost and find ourself doing something we didn't plan. It's kind of how ADHD leads me around by the nose? No? I'm leaning into that line, "I'm living in a memory trace" as evidence that it's about ruminating in one's own mind and feeling memory is not as sharp or crystal clear as it could be, once was? Perhaps, having been lead around in an overwhelming sense of wonderment leaving one wandering aimlessly.

To visually see the following and outcome is what feels funny, as we consider how sidetracked one can become:

"I came in here for milk and bread,
I’m sure that was the aim.
But now I’m buying tools instead,
And that’s not why I came."

It is great imagery and suggestion through these scenes to imply that we lose focus, can be impulsive, even do/buy things we could possibly have no need for. For me, it's a URL hit that leads to another and I'm off shopping for houses or cars when I just wanted something to keep our outdoor cat warm.

There is so much truth in what you offer. I liked that I could get perspective once knowing what this prompt was about, with this lack of experienced over here. But it's relatable and readers know what it's like to get lost somewhere that feels like a harmless trap, possibly playing on our wants over our needs? And it speaks to how the human mind functions, sometimes our information narrows down to the point thought becomes so complacent, it's limited. We are funneled into these charming places without realizing we've lost our way, our aim. Am I getting closer? *Laugh*

Either way, fun and a great exploration. This was neatly written and well depicted and has the necessary clarity to reach a reader and get a hopeful tickle. It can seem so surreal and yet very true. Thank you for sharing,

Brian
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