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God Only Knows  [18+]
Will the road she’s on lead her home? 1st in What a Character, August '24
by Amethyst Angel 🍁🙏
Review of God Only Knows  
Review by Cubby
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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*Tulipp* Greetings, Amethyst Angel 🍁🙏! I am reviewing this because I am part of "I Write in 2024"  and your entry is previous to my own. *Smile*

*Quill* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Tulipo* The Positives/What I Liked

         *Bulletv* This is not only a good story, but an important one. I have no doubt there are many Beths out there in situations similar to this one. It's quite horrible to imagine. I remember when I was seventeen years old, so naive and lost feeling. I never fell into the trap Beth did, but I can see how many girls could.
         *Bulletg* I loved the line: The dining room was empty, its silence amplifying the hollowness of my thoughts.
         *Bulletp* Excellent dialogue and great visuals!
         *Bulletb* I also like how you've included the Human Trafficking Hotline at the end. You just never know what someone is truly going through.
         *Bulleto* Including the words to the song God Only Knows was a great idea, too. Beth was really struggling and listening to this song was important, helping her to stay strong.


*Tulipo* Suggestions/Comments to Consider

         Paragraph 1: french fries *Right* French fries I'm guilty of this typo myself, at times. *Wink*
         Other than that, everything looked great!


*Tulipo* Final Thoughts

         I always enjoy reading your stories, and this one did not disappoint. Nice work. And good luck in the contest! Great entry!

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Have a great day and...*Quill*
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