Hello, WalkawayRene!

INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

I enjoyed reading your heartbreaking poem. My heart goes out to you on the loss of your son.

Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting.

You made me wonder... I hope anyway, that some of the people who asked really did care about you and would have been a shoulder to cry on. I hope someone saw beyond your "fine" to your breaking heart and was there for you. It's been almost two years since you published this poem. I imagine longer since your son passed. But my mom passed in 2018 and reading your poem brought tears to my eyes. I still miss her every day. It gets easier with time, but never easy. I imagine you know what I mean. I hope there is someone in your life to whom you can pour out your true feelings and that they will listen and care.

I was curious as to why you didn't start with "The Lion, the Witch, and the Wardrobe" for the series? Maybe I'm mis-remembering, but isn't that the first book in the series? Just curious, not a criticism. It was definitely the first one that I read from this series as a kid.

Your poem felt like it was coming from your heart and was so full of emotion that it brought tears to my eyes. I imagine there are a lot of people who can relate to this poem of yours, and while that's sad too, maybe it would help to know you're not the only one. Especially since covid ... it seems like face to face human caring is rare now. If I could, I'd give you a big hug. I can't imagine anything harder than losing a child.

I was glad to note that this poem of yours has already received four reviews with an average of five stars. I'll be giving it five stars too (because it deserves it), so that makes five with five stars averaged still.

I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your poem about death.

I thought the reviewing genre you selected was perfect for this poem of yours.


IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
I would love to have something great to share here, but I think it's wonderful as it is. Well done!


CONCLUSION:

You wrote a strong, emotional poem about death.

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, soul, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings, comfort, and peace for you!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler












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A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 




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