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CLEARLY ESTRANGED  [E]
POEM on one sided love. Moment, I realize our love is over.
by Hrafnar Árgeir
Review of CLEARLY ESTRANGED  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, and thank you for the review request.

I’ll try to break this down into headings so I don’t ramble all over the place *Smile* Sometimes I have no idea what to say to a poem *Pthb*

Theme

You explore feelings of being trapped in a failing relationship, from which comes the concise one word title “Trapped.” The implication is the narrator still loves the other person and desperately wants to believe there is hope to rebuild what is fast fading away. The tone is gloomy and moody, leaving us mourning the loss of what might have been.

Style/formatting

You employ a centered text with large, bold font, incorporating a fragment of sardonic words from presumably someone other than the main narrator at the top. This might even be a quote from the other person in the relationship, setting the mood for the rest of the item. The formatting is clear and easy to read.

Imagery and meter

You use a free verse with a few scattered rhymes, which flows well and suits the thoughtful tone. Stanzas are fragmented, showing us fleeting thoughts and glimpses of the narrator’s feelings about the situation. I especially enjoyed the visuals of abandoned furniture, which to me implies that someone was used and discarded. This is haunting and memorable.

Overall thoughts

This piece is an excellent snapshot of the emotional damage which is part of a failed relationship. We see the narrator's distress and feel their pain as they describe it in visual terms, employing metaphors to bring their thoughts to light.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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