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 Episode 3- Beyond the door   [E]
Continuation of story " The box that changed my life"
by Ryyth
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

Ah, this is an amusing twist. I remember one of my mentors likes to say that when you're writing a novel or a longer story, you should remember that life is not simple: there's never only one complicated thing the heroes have to deal with. "While they're wrestling the wolf at the door, there's always gonna be rats in the basement..." I think that's a good paraphrase *Laugh* So I see that while Ryuk is trying to figure out what in the world is going on, things are complicated by his father innocently assuming it's a real cat that he once knew. Excellent!

For a moment I thought maybe the father was involved in some sinister way. Perhaps Ryuk's home life isn't as bad as I'd thought? But he's definitely lonely, and the cat lady is setting up to be a charming companion for him, if they can ever have a quiet moment together! Is she going to be a sister or a lover, or simply a loyal friend? You need to make this decision for yourself so you know what you're writing, but I'm sure you already have the relationship parameters in mind.

As before, I'm excited to see what happens next. So far this is quite the story.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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