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 Episode 2 - Strange encounters   [E]
A continuation of the story " A box changed my fate" written by Rhythm Garg
by Ryyth
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

Good work keeping the suspense rolling with this chapter, as we see more questions and no answers in sight. You've ended with another cliffhanger, which is always recommended.

I'd like to tell you about a technique we use to help us think about and plan our stories. We set out goals, stakes, and obstacles for the main character. The goals and dreams and hopes of the MC set the story rolling, and the stakes of what happens if he doesn't achieve what he needs to accomplish, provide tension as the obstacles get in his way. This is a simplistic method of ensuring you have enough plot to keep your story interesting.

The MC should also have a character arc, meaning he deals with an internal obstacle (fear, pain, past trauma, flawed behavior, etc) as well as the external dilemmas which move the story forward. By the end of the story, he should have learned something important about himself and the world around him. This ensures we have a character deep enough for us to be engaged with and cheering for as we continue reading.

Perhaps you should include the note about how you've translated the story at the top of each chapter, since people often find random chapters of stories on their sidebars and don't necessarily read them in order or even more than one chapter at all. It's always best to ensure important information like that is presented to everyone who finds the work. People are sensitive about the use of AI, and some might be upset with you if they spent time reviewing it without knowing the language is not your own.

This is a great story idea here, and I can't wait to see what happens next.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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