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 Review #4768660 |
 |  | My Demon  [] Another cinquain  |
   HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM"Anniversary Reviews"   My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEMThe poem was about a muse who needs to finds some notes.  WHAT I LIKEDNice expression using a good economy of words. There's a lot that's implied here due to the structure so it requires a bit of critical thinking. I love 'stuff' that makes me pause and think.  STRUCTUREThis is a poem is a cinquain. The author explains the form - the poem contains 22 syllables, 5 lines, with a 2, 4. 6, 8, 2 syllable scheme. MECHANICSI did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion would be to increase the font to make it easier on the eyes. DESCRIPTIONSI liked: "Your dreams are moon-shadow and mist" Honestly, this line gives the reader pause. What is moon-shadow? Mist? Moon-shadows deepen an already dark sky. Mist is light and airy and gone in a second. These arrive, linger, and yet can be fleeting causing frustration. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONSThe opening offers a simple invite - "you sing." What do you sing? Keeps the reader reading and wanting to find out more. The title is a nice hit for what to expect with the poem. Succinct and thought provoking. An Angel Army Review
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