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Blinded by the light.  [13+]
Healing in Kansas
by ผีKåreEngaในMontana
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Dear ผีKåreEngaในMontana ,

Some interesting anecdotes and thoughts that I feel are familiar to myself in this short, non-fiction, prompt piece. I'm not surprised that prose began evolve into the sound of beautiful poetic depictions by the end.

I assume the quote and not the music video is prompt for this non-fiction construct that appears that it might not have been completed for submission for whatever activity this was.

What you've related in the opening is so familiar, a diploma and what good is it. A certain Northern college misspelled my first name on a B.A.! That's the only thing that gave it worth for me. It's a wonder how tuition still manages to sky rocket. *Laugh*

Sabetha, Kansas and it's small town feel, maybe in 1975, sounds absolutely welcoming with all the farming depictions and nature in that tiny county region. I have researched a lot of places around the country (for retirement) and that has to be the smallest Midwest area I've come across. For me, the introduction to this settlement of yours is enchanting.

What is it about being penniless/jobless and either in or fresh out of college that feels so nostalgic and romantic to me? There is such a freedom exhibited in your words as you transition out of higher education into poverty in a small town. I think the only thing I would have liked expanded was to give more detail on the lesson in kindness that didn't seem to sync up in details offered here.

I love the feeling of the remembrance of Laura with the long blonde hair, which further captured this feeling of freedom. And let's not forget that depression lifting. College was full on depression for me and I think I was grinding too hard. I can imagine that the headache and worry of college would dissipate and this wonderful, new community would lend to the joy to replace the unhappiness. Only thing missed is a cold drink in hand, view of a sunset and the large dog at your side. Or is that my vision?

This was heartwarming and rich, with details and words economized but functioning so well in a brief write. I don't even wonder about the line, "Images come to mind of ladders and splashing white oil paint, of machetes, velvet weed, and shatter-cane," because it sounds like several jobs, experiences either painting or harvesting. The way described, therapeutic a bit, that I think this fully chased any remaining depression away.

So quick, and maybe a little editing needed for appearance, but overall enjoyed the experience captured by your words here. I happened to catch this on the read and review pages tonight.

Sincerely,

Brian
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