Hi Jagbu,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is a combination of serenity and surprise. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is taken with the peace that exudes the scene and wonders why the speaker wants this peace. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a peaceful walk is interrupted by commotion. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the speaker, and they come across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:



1)I peeking around my-Should read "I was peering around me".

2)Still walking a-There should be a comma after "walking".

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.