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Review #4768293
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 A Strange Universe  [E]
Flash Fiction for contest
by Write-fully Loti
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings and Happy Account Anniversary!

I haven’t met you yet around here *Smile*

I love a good flash fiction story: they’re so easy to read, like fictional “fast food” *Laugh* You’ve set up a realistic situation here with a touch of fanciful fantasy which any fellow campers would find hard to believe. The way the two worlds meshed with the connecting link of the hat is ingenious, although I did feel bad that she peremptorily tossed it into the campfire when she got back. I mean, she just lost the only bit of evidence for the validity of her tale. But whatever *Laugh*

I would recommend using Size 4 Verdana font to make it look more important and interesting on the page. Also, two relevant genres to complete the set is always recommended to help people find the item when browsing. I would suggest “Environment” or “Drama” or “Nature” or “Mythology.” Also, I noticed you used the word “area” twice in the first two sentences, which is usually not recommended. Always best to find a different set of descriptive words *Smile*

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *GemV* *Angel* *HeartT*


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