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Greetings,

This is a surprisingly cute story. I thought it would end on a dark note, but it ends with humor and a fun twist. You’ve nailed the prompt and crafted a story that’s both original and classic. A magician and a disappearing assistant - what could go wrong?

Large clear font, all three genres, and a narrative style which flows well… I don’t have any suggestions for improvement. I know that no more than three hundred words is the requirement for the contest, but as it’s over now, perhaps you can add a little more showing of emotion to the magician as he mourns the apparent loss of his assistant. The simple telling words are great for a flash fiction, and it’s a good story the way it is, but this is the only suggestion I can think of making.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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