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| Hi Michelle, I found your story as I was reading through my favorites list today. I was happy to find "Those Shoes!!!" I am pleased to read and review this delightful true story. It is one I shall not soon forget. That is the end of my review at the beginning! Your writing style blends well with my reading style! You tell a whale of a tale with patience giving just enough detail for me to imagine the action. I saw the brown shoes in my mind. I heard the protests of the true owner of them. I was emotional engaged in the story from reading the title with three exclamation points. I am one who uses them often. I like the emphasis they give to an item. The reward was at the end of the story writing out the moral of the story. It left me satisfied that I, indeed, did not throw my time away reading another story in the wee hours of an East coast morning. One thing that stopped me a bit was in the first words, "Those shoes !" The space between shoes and the exclamation point stuck out. I see why you did it, but it caused me to go back and think about it before I got to the reading the story phase. I have a penchant for autobiographical stories. I thoroughly enjoyed the moral, the character development, and the pace with which all the players and story line moved. Great job, Michelle! Write on! tracker  
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You responded to this review 08/04/2024 @ 5:45am EDT