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 Nature encased within moments of time.  [E]
Inspired by spring itself.
by Wandering Thoughts
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings,

This is a charming poem with lots of potential for inspiration and beauty. Your vocabulary shines with vivid imagery and colorful metaphors which make for an engaging and picturesque read. However, I wonder why you enclosed it with quotation marks and included a period/full stop at the end of each line. The reading flow of your free verse would be greatly improved if one were not drawn up and forced to pause at each line. I appreciate the wisdom of your theme and the care you’ve given to creating this piece; all it needs are a few minor adjustments to enhance our overall enjoyment of it.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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