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 | Writer's Block  [13+] Brief Description  |
| (4.0)| Congratulations, Geoff! You have recently completed your tenth year in this international community of writing inspiration. The following observations are offered in the spirit of friendly camaraderie and constructive support, but they are nothing more than one person's opinions, so take them or leave them for whatever you think they may be worth. TITLE: The sign on this entrance will surely resonate with many members of this particular community. However, it has been used so many times over and over and over that it has lost a large portion of its punch. The first snow dazzles people with its pure white duvet that sparkles with the clarity of a fine diamond. However, it loses its luster after it has been around a while--trampled, plowed and churned into dirty sludge. Language suffers the same fate. Original phrasing and figures of speech appeal to readers like the aroma of Grandma's fresh-baked pies cooling on her windowsill, but stale, overused clichés disengage an audience faster than Leatherface dismembered victims with his chainsaw. Creative writers often use the most familiar terms to capture ideas and get them down on paper before they flitter away like fireflies in the night, but those hackneyed phrases must be weeded out before the work is presented for public consumption, just as Grandma would cull overripe fruit before baking her pies. I believe you could attract a lot more interest with "The Refuse Of My Mind." FORM & STRUCTURE: The poet writing free verse must compensate for the lack of traditional structure by designing the title, line, stanza, and rhythm to provide the greatest impact in an efficient manner. Careful design of the word selection and arrangement, the length and density of each line, and the breakdown of stanzas must provide a natural rhythm. That is, through much toil in search of precise language, experimentation with forming lines and stanzas, and extensive revision, the poet carefully crafts a work that appears natural, authentic, and convincing to the reader. Dividing the composition into several stanzas helps to control the pace and sharpen the focus, allowing your readers to absorb each impression before moving along to the next. IMAGERY: Imagery is the lifeblood of a poem. Like a craftsman carving, molding, painting, and polishing wood, stone, clay, or some other material, the poet uses words to shape and paint pictures which present some lyrical impulse or spiritual truth. Rather than TELLING the audience about those feelings, the poet SHOWS the impressions through distinct images that project emotional overtones and associations with other images and events. In this way, the poet stirs an emotional response from the audience. The distinct sensory details, such as The sounds of Laughter and Love litter the Earth like blades of dying grass. enable your readers to relate with this experience very effectively. POETIC TECHNIQUE: The intermittent rhyming and alliteration help to generate a rhythm which keeps your narrative flowing nicely. NARRATIVE: The fourth line captures the essence of this process exquisitely, which is one reason I suggested that phrase as the title. OVERALL IMPRESSION: Whenever someone complains about having writer's block, I suggest that they write about the writer's block, and you have just demonstrated how effective that can be. Thank you for sharing! If you are interested in learning more about the craft of composing poetry, or merely chatting with a few like-minded wordsmiths, we would love to have you join our discussions in "The Poet's Place " group.Let the creativity flow from your soul!  Dave "The Poet's Place " * All items are rated in accordance with the guidelines provided in "Comment-In-A-Box" . My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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